Ja, ich danke Ihnen Zepla. Es gab keinen besten Teil in dieser Geschichte, wirklich kurz und bündig (Uh, nur knapp), aber wie ich schon sagte, NO Semikolon.

Good to see an update, I'll review every chapter now. Wish I had writers block every now and then but my minds the other way around. To many stories to actually write.

You are so funny, you make me laugh...you should make up and write your own story one day, I would read it with your witty wordplay, it's hilariously wonderful. For some advice, don't use so many caps, indent a new line almost everytime you've got dialouge and watch your run ons. But other than that...

Hand basket...recession...lol

Well, I wouldn't say this has too much detail or less detail. It's somewhere in the middle. As they say: "Something can be always better." In my opinion I think you should fix all the minor error's before continuing. Moving on to the good side, The story is great the plot is great everything is great except for the minor error's.

I'm really happy that you write so much. My only suggestion is that you use more commas and less run-ons. I liked the first chapter description in the first paragraph, good job! If you don't have your own story with your own characters going I suggest you should.

Nice. Sorry haven't reviewed awhile. been busy with plot for friday the 13th story Emerl vs Jason.

nice story u should put yuck in it

Nice plot begining so far, also very descriptive. Can't wait to read more