Hilarious, but appropriately poignant.
Ariel_of_Narnia

I love the ending. Peter sounds slightly...young, but still a very good piece of work.

Wow wowee wowee wow.

That was totally flipping awesome.

That was wonderful because you didn't make their mom think they were crazy instead you gave him the bible. Thank you.

Wow, Violet Fire Krazed! Very interesting concept. I really like your idea.
It's sweet how supportive and loving Helen is (I think I remember from somewhere that's Mrs. Pevensies' name). Your description of the doctor's office is really good, and the Doctor himself sounds like a very nice man. And Edmund, reading a book on Law! *smile
The only thing I would suggest is try not to use modern terms like "Lame-o" But this is one of your older stories, after all.

At first blush, it would seem to be AU because there is no indication of Aslan telling Peter during the Golden Age that he (Aslan) is in our world. However, after thinking it over, the contradiction isn't really that great, or that important. The reaction of the doctor is very realistic, as is Peter's fear that his mother will think him a lunatic. With regards to his mother's reaction, she must know Peter very well to conclude he's not a lunatic.

All in all, this was very well written. It's now one of my favourites.

Oh my goodness! I can hardly believe you actually wrote about this! I've always wondered how those battle wounds would have bodily effected the Pevensies in England; lo and behold, I wasn't the only one! I really enjoyed the part when the doctor thinks that it's abuse, and he is only convinced otherwise after seeing the shock on Mrs. Pevensie's face that was quite a genius idea, actually. But the best part is definitely when the doctor is determined to report it, and Peter pulls out his magnificent face and subdues him with that kingly demeanor that we are so used to seeing in Narnia! I loved that, I really did And last, I was so glad to find out that Mrs. Pevensie didn't dismiss Peter's story. Not only did she believe him, but she understood. Beautiful story!

I love this story. Esspecially the ending. I always thought that the Chronicles of Narnia represented the Bible. The Last Battle is actually quite similar the the book of Revelations. I like the way he was able to tell his mum the story.

This is a great story! I think it rates right with Magnificent!

I absolutely loved it! It was real satisfying and made me happy by the time I had finished reading it. The only qualm is that when the doctor days Then I'm afraid that I'll have to take this to the government." I think that sentence is slightly extreme and that the doctor would have said something else like I'm going to have to take this to the police or something like that. The word government somehow sounds a bit over exaggerating. Besides that one small sentence, I have to say It is the best one that I have read by you so far! Great ideas and keep writing!

Awesome!

Fighting for His glory,

HisWarrior

Awesome work! I love this story! The end was great!
In Aslan's Name,

Queen Susan the Gentle

Oh so beautifully written! Very interesting points and mother/son reactions. Lady Rosebud

I just wanted to tell you that I really liked the ending. It wrapped things up very well, and I LOVED how you showed that here on earth Aslan "is" Christ. I'm sure C.S. Lewis would be happy to know that you got his hint. Over all it was well writen! Good job!)

Very nice story! I read it because it made me think of a really humorous story on The Lions Call about Edmund and Lucy going to the dentist. Well, anyways, this was a good story. And you also used good grammar and puncuation. Thumbs up!