Wow. you know what? I can't wait for Jim's injury. I mean, yeah, he's been hurt a few times, and it's been good (what can I say? I'm a Jim-Sadist) but I'm waiting for the BIG one. the Spectacular one. One which I KNOW you have in you, somewhere. :D It's gonna keep me awake tonight! Waiting impatiently,
Love,
LM

Wow! That first chapter was intense. I can't wait to get caught up.

You have a very nice flow going on with this chapter too--every paragraph blended in smoothly to the next. :)

This is extremely well written! You have a wondeful grasp,on the charact ers, particularly McCoy. I find many of the writers for the new movie cast Mccoy as almost evil, as almost enjoying being nasty to Spock and others. You have him exactly as I see him, caring, sarcastic, dedicated-a wonderful doctor who is deeply concerned about all of his people. I hope the next installment comes soon!

Your story is so beautifully heart wrenching i was crying the entire time i was reading the last two chapters. I loved how you intertwined Sulu and Chekov's chapters; it just seemed appropriate. The way you manage to convey the emotions you do through the characters and interactions amazes me. How you use the simple method of dialogue to help a person's personality show, using even the subtlest vernacular true to the actual character is fabulous. I love how you portray Bones and his staff, how they all manage to understand what the doctor need before he asks, evidence to the coherent team they have to be in order to sane the lives they do.

The only reason i can say i didn't really like this chapter is because I'm not really an Uhura fan, but you portrayed her excellently so that really doesn't dwell too much. Also, though I much prefer certain a slash pairing than Spock/Uhura, I thoroughly enjoyed how you portrayed their relationship, even if it was strangely open to the rest of the crew at one point.

Otherwise, I've completely and utterly enjoyed your story, and please keep up the amazing work and update soon.

Completely awwesome! Excellent writing, description and action. Will review more later. Great!

I'll start of with I can't wait for more, and move on to me loving the way you've painted Spock and Uhura's relationship. From the moment on the bridge where he makes that call, to the argument in Vulcan and the duet. It's adorable without being too much so and allowing for the strength and both characters as well as the guardedness of their nature and relationship.

I also love that throughout every chapter there are those moments where we see how competent McCoy knows his staff is and just how good they are. From Christine to, well everyone else. I like that appreciation and observation. Then again I just love your McCoy. So it's probably a bias opinion.

Normally I shy away from anything remotely slash like. It's reflexive I suppose more than anything, not for any moral objection, but rather because I don't see the relationship in that light usually. I say this because it's one of those pieces that makes me readily accept an idea I had not previously entertained and am not prone to contemplating. Which is supposed to be a compliment but I may have done it in a really backwards way. lol Basically I'm not usually a fan but you made me, maybe not a total convert, but appreciative of it. It was totally cool with me and I don't find that many pieces that way. Which my friends who aren't strictly heterosexual or at all tend to tease me about.

Okay so really long review all the say I liked it and thought it was heart breaking and sweet and just very well done. *eye roll* Sorry for rambling, but hey I love long reviews, maybe you do to.

May all the stars be thanked that writers aren't (usually anyway) as sadistic in the live world as they are in the fictional one. If they ran the torture business... Tehe

Gripping and compelling and so many other wonderful things that escape my vocabulary right now.

I adored the tone of this chapter on it's own. I loved your Spock and your Jim is fast becoming one of my favorites, even only in glimpses you seem to capture so much of what makes the character great, but your McCoy? I've yet to see it's equal.

Damn fine work.

It's so easy to love your Bones, straight off from the first chapter he feels so right, and then you went and made me fall for you Scotty too. I loved this, the voices and the subtleties and just all of it.

I am completely loving this story, it's fabulous and gritty and real and... Yeah. Love it.

Wow all the chapters are amazing, but seriously, bonus points for making SpockxUhura adorable and sweet and shiver worthy because I'm generally pretty wary of the pairing. This whole story is just great and I love how every character is written so well and augh like just wow ^^

I mean to leave a review for the other chapters, but I'm forcing myself to leave a review for this one because it's been stuck in my head for the past three days. I read this fic two hours after I saw Star Trek and although I'm not a Trekkie, this fic slayed me. It was really nice.

Your Chekov here is a great example, for me, of what I thought Chekov was all about. He's all determination and sweetness, and when you reversed that with the illness...I died. :P Your Chekov got very delicious, and I always love when innocence turns a bit in the nefarious direction. I want a happy ending too and you kind of give me that in Chapter five, which I liked because you didn't wrap things up in a neat bow, just suggested that they'd get through it somehow and things would be different, perhaps awkward. It was not a fairy tale, and I'm glad you dodged that.

McCoy is wonderfully paternal, and it's his sympathetic view that really makes this work for me. I love the whole idea of an illness and the idea of this fic in that each of these chapters is about a character but really, at its heart, about McCoy too. :) I'm pleased, too, that I had to piece together what exactly had happened to Chekov. It was inventively sick, too, which I appreciated. :)

If you'd like something a bit more constructive (and I do that, so if you don't please stop reading!), I'm not sure you've got the balance between dialogue and narration quite right. Your narration is overwhelming at times - especially in the earlier chapters, actualy - and it's hard for me to keep myself interested. The plot of this chapter kept me in, but the narration was stil a bit slow too in the opening. I like how you try to have us piece it together with the characters, but perhaps a little more obliqueness would be a better route. I don't know, I'm having the same problems in my writing, and I think it's because I concentrate on the subtext too much. Does that help? I hope so.

The medical jargon sounds right and well-researched, so if you're making stuff up you're fooling me. :) I don't think McCoy is getting maudlin or too sentimental either, which is a hard balance to strike, so very well done. I also enjoyed your Spock in this chapter. I get the feeling he would be like that with Chekov, considering they're similar in the whole "intelligent child having to be an adult" department.

Overall, great choices and one of my absolute favorite things you're doing in this chapter, so I had to leave a review. Also, you inspired me to write some Chekov/Sulu. Your Chekov was particularly great for me and since I love his character I really wanted to push his boundaries. I'll publish it later this week.

Thanks again for the brilliant read, and have a nice day. :)

Bones/Jim brotherly hug! Perfection :D

I really like your story but I have one boo boo you need to fix. In the second to last paragraph of Chapter 3, you refered to McCoy as "chief medical examiner." Medical examiners is another name for coroner, as in autopsies and dead folks. I'm Sure that McCoy has done a few of those in his time but his job is mainly with life people.