Omg, yay, this was such a fun read. ^.^

You set up the background and the atmosphere well in the first couple of paragraphs, detailing the state of the world and the scene at hand in a concise and interesting way. Since the caravan leader was trying to keep a straight face as he resurrected a legend that none of the others knew, I was wondering whether *he* was Alex until the stranger joined them - then it was, like, "oh, it's *him*, and the leader was just trying to sound solemn the way everyone does when they're telling a creepy story".

The legend was nicely exaggerated and mythicized; you got me laughing at 'bastard child of Nereid and Boreas'. The image of a giant mecha and a little loli creating a child, in or out of wedlock... That has to be one of the weirdest, creepiest pairings in any fanfic ever. o.O I guess this generation is a little out of touch with the summons' appearances?

It'd be interesting to know how much resemblance some parts of the legend bear to this Weyard's real history. Were there plagues and famines in Imil while Alex was growing up? It could be an explanation for the size of the Mercury Clan in the game, or it could be an exaggeration of a gradual decline of the sort that was occurring all over Weyard. If that part was true, then this Alex might really have been scapegoated and kicked out, or might have left voluntarily in search of the power to turn things around; the legend could easily have gotten twisted either way. It's food for thought, anyway.

The merchant mixes up his tenses a bit: "The guardian of Weyard stole a portion of the Golden Sun to prevent this act from occurring, and the demon howls". I know the Wise One did that before the narrative's present time, but it'd sound better if you used "had stolen".

I wonder how much is true of the end of the tale, too. Alex seems so amused by the whole of it that is seems highly unlikely he 'destroyed half of Weyard', but he must have gotten into some sort of trouble with Isaac and Mia. The fact that he habitually keeps his weapon hidden implies dark things about the way he expects to use it, but there's nothing to confirm that still expects to run into Isaac again - or that he still needs to. (If he hadn't found Isaac and settled things with him by the time untold centuries had passed, one has to wonder how Isaac could hide so well...) It's certainly strange to think how the merchants might have reacted if they'd known it was him; would they even have believed him if he'd pulled back his hood to tell them, if they saw that he wasn't all rotting and zombified? XD

I enjoyed reading your version what Alex's story might mutate into if left long enough. I wonder if that name has taken on the same negative vibes as say Lucifer or Medea? I'm actually surprised they still remember it, it’s so undramatic I could easily believe that people had just quietly dropped it along the way or altered it to something more demonic.

No preferences when it comes to Mudshipping, so no bricks.

omg! very cool very suspenseful! loved it! i want more!

*throes shoes*
hehe, just kidding.
*this is my first review, im not experienced as reviewer*
I liked how the mercury clan desintegrated because of Alex, and how he reacted calmly to the tale told by the old man. Also,I think Isaac/Felix never killed Alex, but anyways, cool plot-twist!
Keep up the good work!
From Jaime997-Devote GS Fan

Don't worry, Spirit. I won't throw shoes at you.
*throws flip-flops*
XD lol It's all right. A teeny reference to Mudshipping won't stain your reputation. ^^

I really liked the concept of Alex being related to heaven and hell, and particularly that he was the cause of the disintegration of the Mercury Clan. It makes him even more of a villain than ever!

Good job! \^^/

*throws brick*
Thou shalt not imply mudshipping!

Well jokes aside...
I thought the story was quite entertaining and had a nice flow in it. As reader you were able to tag along with the story and in doing so it felt a bit like sitting right there at the camp :D

But I must admit I liked the poem more.
A legend like this, passed down generations should be in form of a poem. (That's just my opinion here) It somehow gives a legacy a much more mysterious character.

Nevertheless I enjoyed reading it.
So keep up the good work!
-ShiaoPi

P.S.: Got to read A Guardian's Light later (It's after midnight already in Germany :D )