cute story so far, I really like it. I am a little concerned about the writing though, the way you switch between each couple. Try to devote at least a few sentences to each couple before switching to the next. When you switch around two to three times per sentence the way you do, it makes it very difficult to read. I had to stop reading a few times, because it took to much effort to keep track of who was saying what and what couple you were talking about. Other then that, I love it. Really it's just a small thing, but it makes a big difference. Please update soon.

Ja matta