So good, so Ron did not remember? Great one shot
Until next time
Gloria

i think the beginning was fantastic and you could have turned it into a great multi fic piece about time travel, however, the way that you wrote it into a one shot was done rather well and i enjoyed your story, keep up the good work!

well done

Hm... the smoothness of the change in timeline was a bit unnerving.

Best lines:

YOU are the reason she's dead! If it weren't for you she'd be here right now!”

“That bastard's dead and you still can't say his name. How pathetic.”

“You never could do anything on your own. That's why she's dead."

“Two months . . . twenty one days . . . and . . . and . . . we . . . we would have been wed.”

“You were the one who broke into the Ministry's vaults.”
“Yes. And it was rather fun too,” replied Harry with amusement in his voice. “I can see why people become thieves. The thrill of sneaking past unseen. The rush that comes with almost being caught. The excitement of escaping with your prize.”

"Sometimes I think that that's all I am, death incarnate. Or, at least, I've felt that way since Hermione was killed. I've been dead ever since that day, felt dead since. And the part of me that . . . that was . . . he died along with her in that cave.”

“And how do you know we'll be better off?” asked Ron. “How do you know that the future you'll create will be better than this?”
“I don't...And before you say it, yes. I am being selfish. But I think I'm entitled to be selfish damn it."

Worst line:

“I'm glad we were friends.”

I enjoyed this. It might have been nice to see a little more of what happened after Harry went back, but the story still hangs together as it is. The conversation between Harry and Ron was really great; it's a wonderful scene and well played out. I love the dark version of Harry with just a hint of the boy he used to be shining through (the bit about "I can see why people become thieves" made me smile). Nice fic.

I really like this story, at the beginning with Harry and Ron's conversation with each other there is a sense of impending darkness in Harry's soul that is very intriguing. It softens somewhat with his admittance to Ron that he was glad that they were friends.

While your ending was fine, I wish we could have seen what did happen in the past when he went back in the past or at least a small vignette of his life in the here and now with Hermione featuring Harry's own thoughts. All in all I really enjoyed your oneshot and look forward to reading more of your work.
Lierian

this was a very good storyline.

Love it! Nice, short and sweet and it still served its purpose! LOVE IT! POST MORE ASAP!
love ya,
Sam

very nice, like te fact that ron realized soemthing hapened before adjusting to the new reality

Well its great to see you again. I love your DBZ fics, but I'm not about to demand that you continue them. I didn't know you were on portkey but I'll look you up. As for this fic, I like it and hope to see more in the future.

ohh, yea, this one is a goodin. And I can understand what harry is doing, would prolly do the same.

I'm confused

veryy god :)