OH! This was so beautiful! I loved how long it was and how every moment of it I was either laughing or going "Oh, wasn't that sweet?" This is just so perfect and very well written! I love when you write lemons of these two. ^^

One of my favorite lines was "Although it worked less well on the pureblood, who always seemed ready, the lovely twit." Oh, that line is just so...So ZERO. It really is him and I loved that he called him a twit. That is something that I can see Zero saying!

Great job, as always. ^^

nose bleed
this captor is so hot and smexy
droll

I'm glad you wrote this missing scene from "Take the Lead". It's really beautiful, passionate. Really love Kaname's and Zero's gentleness to each other. It really completes the story of "Take the Lead". I hope you will write another oneshot about the next time when Zero takes Kaname in the same manner as this.

That was amazing! This was my first time reading a Zero x Kaname fanfic but I'm glad it was yours. It was so sweet and cute and hot! I couldn't help but let out my fangirlyness and squeel the whole time I was reading. Great job! :)

*dies* Ah...wow. That's all I can say is wow.

I cannot honestly remember if I've reviewed any of your stories before...I feel like I have, but I can't remember D: Oh well, I'm reviewing now.

I feel that in anything you write, it's like you've captured someone's emotions in a jar and the jar is the writing. Did that make sense? It sounded better in my head XD But really. There have been two instances (okay, a LOT more than two XD) that have really struck me because of the raw, pure emotion embodied in the scene.

The first is from Blood Moon, at the very beginning, I believe it was when Kaname found Zero half dead and was forcing him to take a bath. The language you used to describe Zero's cuts on his wrists, Kaname's reactions, and Zero's pain in his heart was incredible. To use an overused cliche, it literally painted this picture in my head of Zero and Kaname, both in utter pain and anguish, the latter so scared for and in love with the former.

And the second is from Crimson Door, when Kaname and Zero are in the forest and Kaname bites Zero for the first time. I think this may have actually been my favorite part, because of Kaname's intense hunger and Zero's initial confusion then acceptance, sort of. I couldn't find a better word for it. It was a pivotal part of the story, and that may be why I like so much. ANYHOO

Also, I'm very fond of your characterization of Zero and Kaname. Kaname in your stories is much less cruel and omnious than his manga counterpart. Zero is also much more understanding and aware than his manga counterpart. Both are far less...obsessive than they are in the manga. I know I've definitely not put the characters as they are to me into words adequately; too much manga and yaoi XD XD

I so dearly wish I had the eloquence and ability to present emotion in its raw, most pure form in writing. Art is by far more my forte and capturing emotion there is so much easier visually than it is in words. I have devised an elaborate plan in which I shall kidnap you and force you to write the living hell out of Vampire Knight, all the while standing over you with bull whip and dangling dinner scraps above your head just beyond your reach XD I think it's a rather wonderful plan, don't you?

One last thing and I promise I will shut up (a promise I do not intend to keep, mind you). A thought struck me me after reading Take The Lead, especially with the mention of Shiki and Rima being married (did I read that right?) but also being and sleeping with Takuma, "What would happen if the subject of the future of the Kuran line ever came up, and it became necessary (or at least expected) for Kaname to take a wife or at least produce an heir? What then? How would such a circumstance play out between Zero and Kaname, the relationship being that of what it is in these fanfictions?" It intrigues me very much, since Zero and Kaname have a love so passionate and endearing and Zero is still not completely comfortable with the customs of the vampire culture. Obviously it didn't pop into my head so eloquent (or an attempt to be anyway) and well thought out XD

All right I'll stop rambling now. Continue to work your wonderful yaoi magic. It never ceases to completely capture me and make my nose bleed XD

A very, very insane and very, very obsessed fan,

ONiONLADi7

Hello!I found this story on your site-thing, read, and really enjoyed it! I've read read your other stories (up to this one but haven't really reviewed...sorry!)but I really like them! Please continue with the stories, their really good!

(This is Arty speaking)So... many... orgasms... @.@

Dear Goddess, that was beautiful! It was DELICIOUS! The tenderness, the adoration, the SMEX! It was all too much! *passes out, twitching and shivering in the aftermath of a yaoigasm*

(Eri enters and molests)

First, let me start off by saying how much I enjoy reading this. It was at times pure, blush-inducing, wish-fulfilling-ly passionate; heartwarming and truly touching, and sinfully funny. Sometimes even all at once.

Now, there ARE just a few things that sorta dropped this from a perfect 10 in my book, which I hope you don't mind or am offended by my stating them here. ^^U

The most noticeable thing is how often you used the words "delight", "lovely", "slight", "delicious", "unintentional", and "pleasure" >/< or varying plurals thereof. A-All I wanna say about that is this: Thesaurus is your friend. (I truly, earnestly hope you don't take this as needless criticism or nit-picking. I mean it to be purely, wholeheartedly constructive.)

Did it just get hotter or is it only me?

You're a good writer. Really. That was howt!

holy, that was soo incredible, gah!!i think it's like one of the best shagging scenes i have ever read.truly, mindblowingly fantastic.it was soo sifferent, soo unique. i mean the whole telepathic thing, n all the vampire attributes coming to play here.devastatingly well done.

you have flaring knack for disecting the character's mind, and displaying the beautiful and crazy innards soo well to the readers through words.we can understand their thoughts and insecurities so easily.

and i visited your homepage, and saw the fanart there, wow, could you be any more talented.those pictures totally burned me; so sinfully debauched.

i can sincerely say that this was brilliance.this date couldn't have been more perfect.

Zomgoaash 8D
I'm ashamed of my limited vocabulary for not having the appropriate words to express my thoughts.
Like...Damn!
I adored the scene where Kaname bathed Zero and he was like 'some kind of ancient water god or spirit' 8D
And although some people here found the 'ongoing' sex scenes a wee bit tiring... I absolutely loved it! 8D
You, my friend, have written new history for this fandom. Keep writing! XD

It almost made me cry at how beautiful that whole story was. I love Kaname and Zero together. Thank-you so much for taking the time to write this. I was waiting to read after reading Take The Lead. Thank-you again! :D

OMG that was by far one of the hottest (and longest) KxZ sex scenes ever. XD

I'm exhausted from just reading it!

Awesome writing.

My favorite part: "Next time we do this, I'm taking you, Zero thought delightedly at his lover." X3

Hello! I'm so sorry for reviewing so late. Holidays are close and everybody wants to finish work before it, so life it's getting a BIT crazy lately.

Um, I know that I'm going to be chased and shooted after saying that, but when I read the fic I thought that it was... too much. I mean, too much sex, with the boys going over, and over and over again. I guess that you had the intention of explaining us the new level of intimacy they are reached (the mental contact), and how that, and the loving mood they have after their date, influenced their love making.

But, don't you have the feeling that it was not necessary explaining it with so much rounds? I was reading, thinking that they have already finished, when I found another round... and another... and another one. By the end, the initial purpose of knowing how the boys felt at this stage of their relation and about the new discovery was blurred.

I don't know how I can explain the feeling, or to chose the correct words, but, sometimes, when things are too long it can lose its purpose. I could have done with a one-shot a bit shorter with less sex rounds, they seemed a bit forced at times.

Of course, that's a bit of criticism assuming that nearly nobody can write lemon as you do, so I'm taking the freedom to comment things that, with some other fics wouldn't even exist, because I would be seeing only gramamar incoherences, or typos, or the characters total OOC. You have overcome all that, so I can comment deepest things.

I'm not saying that the chapter was bad. Not nearly that, it was Superb with the feelings, the love, the desire, the dizziness of that new connection, the tenderness... You describe all those emotions as nearly nobody can, I only had the feeling that it would have been better with a shorter one-shot emphasazing those emotions without having them going for round after round of marathonian sex.

I know people are going to kill me for this, but, hey, is the feeling I had and the prize of your success: having idiot people like me finding small things that could be done different when you had reached High Level in fandom. Keep this headline as a summary of my review: awesome as always (a level which it's pretty difficult to reach and keep) but a bit overlong in my humble opinion. At least, when I write you a review from now on you saying that ALL was perfect, you will believe that I'm totally honest :)

Oh my gosh. I swear. Don't eat chips while reading this!!
I made that mistake!
x)
gosh it made my stomach feel sickly.
o_o which i think is really odd cuz i love yaoi so much. I swear I need help.
What didn't help was that I had lemon on my chips and once i got to the last few they were all squishy and slippery and made this weird noise when i picked them up to eat them. I mean talk about awkward!
;)