Definitely I agree with you that Kaidan turning out perfectly fine wouldn't've been as exciting... or at least as satisfying. It's more realistic this way, I think. You did a good job with this scene; this kind of stuff is hard to write.

Your story here was really unique and a good adventure to read. It conveyed emotion very well throughout, and overall, just really fun to read. Looking forward to the BDtS you're planning. :) And good luck to you on your original works!

That was really good! I remember I'd started reading it a long time ago and totally forgot about it until you posted this last chapter.

It's all very believable and I enjoyed seeing Rahna, even if she was a little nuts. I'm a huge Kaidan POV fan.

You really have a good writer's touch and a talent for descriptive language. There were several points in the story where I could not only really see what was going on and what you were saying, but there was so much beneath it too. I hope I'm explaining that properly.

In any case. Great job. Really dug it. :)

Lovely update - happy to read it! Kaidan's grief is very real, and I love the comfort between Shepard & Alenko. Looking forward to more updates!

I really love how deeply you've dug into the character's motives. This piece comes across as more real than many of the quests I was able to see with my own eyes. Absolutely wonderful, wonderful job.

I agree with Shepard; Kaidan has more than biotics going for him. And who knows, maybe it'll turn out where it's like pruning a bush... the plant grows back stronger and fuller when it's been damaged.
Anyway, great ending to a great story. It'll be very interesting to see what you come up with in the future :)

This is a remarkably interesting and unique story. You've done an amazing job here conveying emotion and suspense. It's definitely a page turner. :) I was on the edge of my seat most of the time.

You also made the virus easy to understand for someone who only has a high school level of understanding in that sort of thing. Sometimes it's hard to get the real, simple meaning across without oversimplifying or making things more complicated than they should be, but you did really well.

I like what you did with Rahna's character. Truly sad and frightening.

Looking forward to the fifth and final chapter. Can't wait to find out what happens!

I don't suppose this would be an excuse for you to have Kaidan's biotics powers be super powered now would it? It wouldn't make sense for him to lose them all together, or for them to be weakened.

Sorry, to clarify on my last review: I actually missed chapter three and went straight to four! (I'd only read the first two, but assumed I was actually up to date when I saw you'd published chapter four.) Three is also awesome. :-D Believe it or not, I think I actually enjoyed it more reading it retrospectively than I would have done otherwise. Great action! Your Kaidan is made of awesome. Great to see (after reading Shep describing it) the full reality of him fighting back even restrained and with no amp. :-)

This new chapter is superb! I liked the first three, but found them a little laboured - I thought the interaction between Kaidan and Rahna was a bit unrealistic. But you seemed to have learned and improved so much between writing those and writing chapter four! The style is relaxed, yet taut. The dialogue suits each character perfectly. And the unexpected change in direction, with another character seeing the aftermath of what happened to Kaidan but it not being narrated directly, is *extremely* effective because it creates a sense of mystery and danger around his imprisonment. I'm very interested to see how things are going to work out with his recovery and how he may have to adapt his life. The note of him using biotics aggressively without an amp leading to hypoglycaemia was a nice observation, really lending to the realism of this work. Onto my favourite authors list you go! :-D

Yay! A new chapter! =^.^=

I really do like all the medical references. They made alot of sense, and it made this chapter even more enjoyable to read :)

I can't wait to see what happens next :D

Lol. I caught the turnip reference.
This fic is really amazingly good. I seriously want to give Rhana a falcon punch. Seriously.
I'll be looking out for updates in the future! :D

TURNIPS! ROFL
That was awesome! Great ending note!

I love the virus and the technobabble in this chapter. My inner nerd is squealing with delight. Now I know the meaning of the name of your story. Very cool.

I also so love how you had Shepard exercise her Spectre status. (Y'know it wasn't until playing again last night and achieved Spectre status that I realized the spelling was Spectre and not Specter... lol)

Eagerly awaiting to see if Kaidan makes a recovery.

you continue with this story tight now! i must have n update! i must must must must must MUST! have n update!

This is why I don't read WIPs. I can't take suspense! Ugh!
Ahem. I mean, please continue. :)

Awaiting the next installment, really enjoying the series!