I think your story is wonderfully going so far, and I hope you continue soon. A simple idea would be Jake's, and then Mr.Baker and Mr. Murtaugh's POV on the whole Sarah/Elliot thing. Another idea would be to have the you corrupted my child fight between the two dad's(cause its bound to happen sometime) and...yeah.

Your Twilight twist, if you don't want a Edward x Bella, try to make your story focused on a another Cullen pairing, e.g. Rosalie and Emmet, Jasper and Alice. Or, totally steer away from the vampires and go for the werewolves. From there, more infinite canon pairings! XD

Hm...

That's right. I'm Sarah too, and that's who I'm named after in the bible!v

I like it./ keep it going

Can you update? Please? I think it should be Mr. Baker and Mr. Murtaugh that walks in on them, and we should see how they react. Thanks so much!

Now that was great it's been a long time since i'ne read 1 that good it kept me interested from the start wich is saying something cuz ive got A.D.D good job keep writing

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the story seems really good so far, but you said you wanted some ideas...

1. you could have Mr. Murtagh forbid elliot to date sarah, so they start dating secretly,
2. in the next chapter get the baker's reactions toward sarah/elliot (especailly jake's pov)
3. or finally u could have their relationship start another baker/murtaugh fued- it your fault-your child's messing up mine kind of thing. Thats only a few...but continue because u hav a wonderful story started!

This was great, keep writimg! :)

I've gotta a question. Are Sarah and Jake twins? I always kinda wondered that. And also, I always that, in the movie, Daniel Murtaugh would've been more Loraine's age. (If you don't know who I'm talking about, look up Robbie Amell.) But who knows, maybe my opinion will change once I actually start reading this story. (All of this is like 500 or more letters! WOW!)

Great chapter! I think it should be Serena walking in on them so they don't get in huge trouble! Ha! I loved this chapter! :D

Loved the new chapter but I think you should start a new line whenever there is dialog it makes it easier for the reader to read it clearer. But other than that I really liked it.

gah I hate you. lolz jkjk luv it! post more! luv it!

This is awesome hope u can update faster
sarah and elliot are such a Cute couple :)

tha story is boss but taylor lautner is mine!lol

nice story. are you going to post more?

You must write more, We love it!
I also like Talyor Luanter.


(P.S. we are three people useing the same acount.)