I really like it so far. The only thing is that Hatori's name is spelled with one 't'.

I'm off to see chapter two!

I loved this story. While I was reading it i was listening to the song 'O Death' by Jen Titus, it fits prefectly!...at least for chapter 2)

Um, you do know that "Ja" means "Yes" in German, right? It was a great fic, and I liked it so much! I'm reading it for the fifth time now. )

this was a sad story, you did good work.

aw... It's over... It was such a cool little fic! I don't suppose you have any plans for a sequal, like Kyo's past, or Haru's, Shigure's, or more of Yuki's?

TT_TT

that was so sad. I loved it :D lol, I liked how you incoperated Aya's betrayal into the story... It makes me sad, in a good way.

Ah, angest. We all love it, for some strange reason. This is both beautiful and touching... And it makes me go ;.; poor Yuki. It was a very well-written piece. _

Very well done! Great actually! I love how you tied in those scenes from the anime alltogether like that!

Whelp, bye for now!

The title caught my attention right away. And your story is very well done! The story pretty much entranced me to keep on reading! Very good job, this is going on my favorite stories list.

Oh, so sad. But a wonderful story anyway! I love Hatori, Shigure and Yuki! So sad that Yuki went through all that when he was just a little kid! (but I guess that's what makes Yuki, Yuki) And it's sad that Hatori and Shigure have to always be the badguys, always carrying on with Akito's evil plans! I will kill Akito!

Was this really Ina-chan's first fic? I'm Ina-chan's #1 fan! Well, that's probably not true, I bet there are other people who have read all of Ina-chan's fics. Oh well, and a message for Ina-chan, never stop writing Furuba! You're so good!

That is so awsome. I love your style

That… was nice.

So it seems as though Hatsuharu actually helped Yuki out of his depression that one time. Interesting.

You write well. Really well. I mean it.

hitokiri-tomoe

Again, that comment about editing.

It was. Sad. And painful. And you were so good at making it sad and painful.

But, really, you have to edit your stories more, so they have a better effect. But the effect’s good enough already.

hitokiri-tomoe

There are a bit of errors in the structure, particularly capitalization of the first letter of a sentence.

But it’s a very well-constructed fic, and very promising for a first fic. But actually sometimes we do better with our first fics. And, yes, it IS angst-filled, but also full of hope, as is so characteristic of Furuba. I particularly liked how Hatori showed affection for his younger cousin and how he said that Yuki needed a place where he can breathe. Kinda reminds me of Kazuma and Kyou, though.

I was particularly struck by that statement about the intensity of his eyes fading. Aw. We don’t want that to happen, do we? My heart just goes out Yuki-kun…

hitokiri-tomoe

Wow! I love it so much! Wait...I mean I hate that Yuli had to go through so much pain, and as a child! But If it doesn't kill you, it makes you stronger! It made Yuki's love for Tohru stronger, no matter what Akito says or does, he can not take Yuki's love for Tohru away! Isn't that sweet!