Oh, what a wonderful one-shot! You master the present tense so wonderfully, it somehow adds to the sweet sadness of the story.

What a spellbinding little picture you've painted here. So beautiful and poignant. Your 'Little Women' works are the best.
Sora

Oh...that's really know how to make words flow together and become something really pretty.

Alex

Can we kill Amy? Please? PLEASE?

Have Jo accidently send a knife flying and it stabs her. Or Jo gets pushed and stumbles against Amy and she's sent into the fireplace...with the fire going.
Or where Amy drowns. Laurie and Jo had gotten too far to notice, so enraptured by their...sexual tension. :D

However I did enjoy the angst. It is good for the soul, no matter how much it hurts sometimes...oh Laurie my dear! Don't give up hope! There's something called divorce in the 21st century.
Erm, I'll go and eat now...?*mwah*

Wow, you are such a beautiful writer! I love the description of Jo, and of Amy. The last line just killed me, "Only of me and you Keep it up, and I will keep reading!

I find myself feeling sorry for him, actually married to a woman he doesn't love and dreaming of the one he does. Although, marrying Amy was what he chose :D Still, I feel his pain, so good work with that.

omg i didn't see that coming. I always wanted him and jo to be together, it made me happy for a moment haha. can't wait to read more

Aw, this was really good. Poor Laurie, poor Jo...and heck, even poor Amy. Though, honestly, I never can well up too much pity for Amy she knew that Laurie was always in love with Jo, so she knew what she was getting into! Hahah...there's my little Jo/Laurie heart bleeding out again! Anyway, this was really good! I loved the descriptions of Jo, and the bit abou ther purposely 'tripping' to let him catch her in his fantasies. This was great, and well written!
Cheers,

Del

I'm glad you posted this! It's lovely, and so tightly and poetically written. In particular, I think it's one of the best physical description I've ever read of Amy, though I know that's just a small small aspect of the story.

.GOD. i am in love with your writing! guh please write that europe fic, coz if it's anything like this it will rock my world. your description just suits the emotion so perfectly it rolls on from one sentence to the next. Maria you rock. now you've made me want to update so i'll hop right to it.

Very nice, I love how it flows. It reads like a poem or a song if that makes sense.
Very good job.