por Benvolio *sigh*

man Balthasar simply has NO idea- and why are the Capels partying again? HELLO?

u should kill him ,that would be the best =) Dont get me wrong I dont want the story to end but... huh, forget it. But PLEASE no beautiful girl to cheer him up, that doesnt fit.

I like ur language! But u should not use that much "thine self" or "mine self", it sounds wrong. Better just "you/thee" in some cases and I think at the end it must simply be "... What have I agreed to?"

plz continue!!

longing for ur update,
HQJ

The Capulets are having another party right after Juliet's death?

And Balthasar really is oblivious. The whole mishegos that left Benvolio alone and suicidal got its start when someone decided to cheer someone else up by suggesting an evening of Capulet party crashing. No wonder Benvolio is reluctant and a little apprehensive at the end.

You might want to take another look at the correct usage of thou/thee/thy. It's not hard to learn, but you haven't got it quite right, and it's really distracting.

YAY!

Truly fantastic! Benvolio rockz =)

Oh, it was very angsty and beautiful *greet ur mood!!* *sigh*

U should really continue, u are gifted. And-I want more XD


HQJ

This is an interesting beginning. It looks like it could well be the structure for a longer and more nuanced piece that would really explore how Benvolio adjusts to being the only young person directly involved in the feud left alive (Valentine doesn't count here, since the Prince's family isn't directly involved), and how he would deal with the complicated emotions and expectations that such a position would bring. You have some nice touches here, including his anger at his friends for leaving him and his musings on the fleeting nature of happiness, and you have some nice Shakespearian turns of phrase such as "doornail companions."

You might want to go and learn the rules for how to use "thou/thee/thy/thine." They're not actually all that difficult -- it's just the unused second person singular in English, like "tu" in Spanish or "du" in German. Just that would really improve the flow of this piece and make it much easier to read.