I'll be honest. I didn't like this chapter.

...least important of all, it's a smutfic. This chapter was smutless. xD

But that could be fine.

More importantly... Ash DOES care for his pokemon. It's not his fault that the show works like that-in most fanfics, his pokemon DO follow their instincts. What's more, he DOES respect Misty, and would fight for her. He wouldn't harm Forretress, and he'd regret it if he did.

More importantly still, however much of an utter prick you make Ash... you kidnapped and raped her. That is ALWAYS going to be worse, however much she ends up liking you.

...most importantly, she would not be forgiving you yet. Especially not over her best friends.

(sigh)

I'm not going to stop reading or anything, but... yeah. Really not your best. Can't wait for more bad, awesome, evil smut though.

Stormy

I read over the chapters of this story, and despite the obvious self-insert of a man lusting after an anime character, it was very well written. The self-insert actually makes it more realistic. ALong with how pokemon can be used to commit acts of rape. I am looking forwards to more of this story.

With All Due Respect,

Roy of Shadows.

Yuri...

I LOVE YURI 3

thankyouthankyouthankyou!

Very nicely done. xP

Also, seeing a clip of Misty as the mermaid, I retract any comments disparaging her appearence. With her hair down? HAWT.

...also, I don't remember if you said you'd worked out a place for me, but I could totally be one of Cloud's trainers. Although I'd want a little more freedom... and I'd be there because I wanted it as much as her. xP

...although I do prefer hetero...

...

I overuse ellipses. XD

Stormy

lovely. Sorry that I hadn't been able to proofread before you posted it up x.x my internet is down and I'm actually on my phone lol. Got kicked out of my mothers house and I'm staying at a friends. Lovely portrayal me, I must say n.n keep up the good work I can only imagine the terrible things were going to do w poor ash and Brock lol.

I think your writing has got significantly better. :)

Stormy

another excellent chapter! hevent heard from you in a while! how you been?

You bastard, lmao. It's about time. Where the fuck have you been?

And good on you for finally including an all important character 8D _ me. Lol We definitely need to catch up. My divorce is almost over, so YOU NEED TO EMAIL MEEEEEEE.

I've a pair of days off from work this Sunday and Monday.

Email me. I command you, Lol

Also, superb job considering the fact that it's been so long since I've read anything of yours. 3

Forever faithful,

Lady Cloud

awesome story update soon

Woot! Tentacle sex is my favorite! Are you british by chance?

well. where do i start? brilliant story from beginning to chapter 6. i can't wait for another chapter of this well-written story. i commend you, Mr. Omalley.

Wow, I really like this story and your writing is pretty good. I just keep wondering who the guy is, this chapter makes part of me think it is Rudy from the Orange Islands(since he mentioned about about "what happened before".) But, whoever he is I can't wait to see what happens for/in the next chapter, and what he has in store for her next.

Keep up the good work. :)

DAMN! I cant wait for the next chapter

Oh man! Thought you were never gunna update! Great chapter man! But,please,update sooner! I had thought you weren't continuing this fic,but am glad to see that you are!

PS-please,please,please,update quickly!

DAMN YOU FELIX FOR REVIEWING FIRST! (

It's great to see that you're finally back in the swing of things apparently we all have seasons we must obey. Lovely work, Grimer is _ *PROD PROD*