Undoubtedly a favourite of mine. Wonderful concept - so refreshing! Alanna's sharp tongue and wit honed by her sojourn within the Tusaine Court. What a character! Alex, too; he's sly, mischievous, and caring in that devious way of his. Fantastic one-shot.

You know, I think I just fell in love with this story. I'm not sure if that's a good thing or a bad thing because of the ending, but either way it's definitely one of the best pieces of writing I've read, plot-wise and style-wise (that makes no sense, does it?).

I think the thing I liked best about this oneshot (please, continue it, because this is just too...creative, and never-been-done-before ish) is your style, and your characterization (I'd honestly write characters instead, because you make them sound real and it's like they're yours and not Tammy's). And the fact that Alex is a semi-main in here. (TP fandom is deprived of Alex - a very bad thing, in my opinion).

Though, if you do end up cleaning this story a little, could I make a suggestion (or even put this in the sequal, because I'm very curious about this) about letting Thom have a little more screen time? If he's in Tusiane, where they're much more lenient, it'd be very interesting to see how he turns out.

...And I'm rambling now. Sorry about that. But yeah, I loved this story (uh, odd place to put this but there are a few typos, just a few, if you wanted to know) and hope you continue it ^^

~Aidan

This had me utterly enchanted.


Honestly, if for nothing else (which is certainly not the case), this fic would totally be worth it for this one line: "Jon almost dies on the spot." You do perspective so well and characterization! Alex's account of what his dance was like was so utterly *Alanna*.

It was long and wonderful and so well written, but I am greedy and can't help wishing there were more.

I really liked this... It was interesting to see how Alanna's personality changed in a totally different setting. It's rare to find good Alex stories, and this one was pretty fabulous!

Great chapter! man I love this story! Can't wait to see where you go next!

Lady mage

You came up with a good idea, but it is rather confusing, it would be better if you eighter anounced a flashback or change of POV, or of you did one chapter in the present and another in the past.

Wow. I'm actually feeling sorry for Delia for once. And Jon really does stay a tw-cough-at without Alanna's influence. Hm... now you HAVE to keep on going! And why is the relationship between the twins so seemingly dysfunctional? I want to know!

This was brilliant! I loved it!
It was an amazing idea, and I'd love to see a sequel!!
Shang Leopard

this was very well done and very revolutionary for canon! I'm going to add it to my Tortallian Epics C2. Great job and I can't wait to see more from you soon,

Lady Mage

I'm glad my 200 or so words could inspire this long and imaginative multi-generational fic from you! I enjoyed reading it.

I liked the alteration between past and present, moving through the chronology. It was an unusual and effective way to tell the story. I do wonder about the first time you introduced the present (not a flashblack, a 'flashforward?'). I didn't catch the shift in time until you hit the END of the flashforward with the names: 'Dain,' 'Alanna of Trebond.' I had to stop and think for a moment to understand what you'd just done with the paragraph to understand the time shift. I could figure it out because I'm familiar with the books; but what about making it clear to someone who isn't familiar with them? I guess there's two ways you can go about fanfiction: writing for the fan who knows as much as you, or writing for the reader who is reading your story without knowing the books at all, and still making it clear for them. I don't know which way is best, but it's something to think about.

I liked reading about Alanna's mother; the bits with the minstrel were very touching. You didn't go with cliches or let them take the easy way out. I also liked Alanna's childhood in Tusaine. That was very well done. And the differences in Alanna-- her social graces, her facility with sharp put-downs (almost like Thom), her altered relationships with the Tortallan boys-- were all very interesting. No George? (Aw... you had a HUGE cast of characters you fit in, so no complaints.) I was amused that there was no Alanna x George or Alanna x Jonathan: it made sense with what you created, and it opened up new possibilites. I was a little disappointed that Alex constantly beat Alanna, but at least that let them be friends/potential lovers, which was very sweet, especially when Alex kept trying to flirt with her by insulting her and stealing her money, ahahaha!

The one that that did make me uncomfortable when reading this was the constant sexism throughout, but that was me putting my own values on the characters. I guess the sexist attitudes are more historically accurate. It just bothers me. :S

Anyway. Yes. Sequel! Do Alanna and Alex fight each other in the war? Will it split them up or bring them closer together? Does Alanna have a 'destiny,' like in canon, if she isn't Jonathan's squire? :)

I love this. The plot is great and the characterization is strangely apt. Alanna's mother's story was very interesting as was more of the background on Tusaine. Alanna's puppy love for Dain was slightly disturbing, but I loved how Alex was portrayed. I really, really hope you continue this.
By the way, I think Thayet's gown when she was presented to court in Lioness Rampant was muslin. Random fact yes.

I really liked that this was written in present tense, and just the overall way you wrote this. I'm a bit confused as to what happened with Ayren after Marinine remarried. And I definitely think you should write a sequel!

Just as Alex is unable to formulate his thoughts and feelings into words about the beauty of Tortall, I am unable to formulate (coherently - if I try, it'll all be gibberish) my own into words about the brilliance of your artistic skills.

And, YES, do post a sequel!