aww! so cute!! and i love how you paired up aura and kite together! BlackRose x Kite stories make me gag! HONESTLY! I mean i like her but NO!!

Arigato gozaimas! Please make MORE! I'd love to see some MORE!

I HATE to say this, but I got a bunch of critics.
First paragraph, 'so peaceful', not 'so peace'.
The third paragraph, it should be 'his story remained', the to be 'was' isn't correct.
Fourth paragraph, again, it should be 'peaceful world'.
In the last paragraph, you should use 'anything' instead or 'whatever thing'.
At Kite's POV, I also spotted one mistake, 'but everything was vanished', you need to change it into 'but everything was vanishing' or 'but everything vanished'.
Tetapi! Tetap saja, cerita yg sungguh bgs! Gak peduli grammarny salah, ini tetap cerita menarik! En kalimat yg diucapin Aura dan Kite (um, Kaito aja dah!), yg 'selamat datang' dan 'aku pulang' it, bener2 memberi kesan seorang suami yg br pulang ke rumah! GILA! Keren banget choy! Tetep menulis dgn semangat ya! Gua akan selalu siap bantu kalau ente perlu!
Satu lagi, maaf ya kalau kritik gua kelewatan, hanya saja gua gak bs membiarkan cerita yg sungguh bgs seperti ini punya bnyk kesalahan. Sori ya, jangan peduliin dah kalau kamu rasa aku nyebelin. Sekali lg, sori banget...

Good chapter, can't wait for more.

nice story avedici...
keep up, and update soon...
it's a good story...
Really

Very nice. After reading your story, now I liked AuraxKite more than him with Blackrose. Tapi memang nasib gua gak pernah maen hack selain G.U. Nevertheless, ideny bgs dan original, mantap dah pokokny!

Good chapter.

Zefi and kite are so cute at the end. thanks for adding this.

interesting chapter, can't wait to see what's next.

Good chapter.

Those two meeting should be interesting.

Heh, so in this story Zefie was modeled as a daughter of Kite and Aura. Makes things quite a bit more interesting I think. I hope you take the time to update the story again soon :3

Cute story. I like the idea. And Zelfie is just TOO CUTE! Can't wait for the next one.

Another good chapter. Aw, Zefies so cute.

Good chapter. Poor Kite.

I'm liking everything about this story so far except for how short the chapters are, but I guess if they were longer you couldn't get updates out as fast as you do...

Aw... Zefies so shy, it's cute.

Good chapter, can't wait until he knows the truth.