I must say, that I am a bit surprised to find the story set in modern times. What a twist. How will she ever find her prince, I wonder?

xJadeRainx

Oh my! That sea witch was terrifying. She is definitely the scariest sea witch I have ever seen. What a dreary exchange!

xJadeRainx

Love can be a dangerous thing indeed. I can't wait until I get to meet Andersen. The fairy tale is sad, yet beautiful. Incidentally, it seems your story is headed in the same direction.

xJadeRainx

Excellent chapter. The cars and apartments surprised me a little bit--I had almost forgotten that this story takes place in the present day. But I enjoyed it a lot, especially the bit in the bathroom where she was playing with the tub and sink. I like Hannah and Christian, and I'm curious about who Lola is.

One itty-bitty typo: “But only because she’s so miserable looking. --You forgot the closing quotation mark at the end of his sentence.

Keep the chapters coming!

~EmmBee

I love this fic! Keep up the great work! :)

Ooh, I love a good Sea-Witch chapter. She's so very creepy; villains who have that scary faux-polite thing going on are my favorite. And eating the mermaid's tongue in order to gain the mermaid's sweet voice--that's disturbing and different. I love that the mermaid's blood is silver (because I am a firm believer in silver blood for magical creatures), and I had never thought before about the potion being able to change EVERYTHING about her, including the color of her blood.

There were just a couple little typos that I saw:

"I filled to the brim with terror." --You forgot the "was" before "filled."

"You are much better of staying here with me." --"Of" should be "off."

Well done. I'm eager to see what happens to her on land!

~EmmBee

P.S. I thought I should say, I like the title of this story. "Learning to Breathe"--it's a good title for a "Little Mermaid" story.

Cool. I really enjoyed this, and I especially liked where you began the story: the peril of nearly drowning caught my interest right away, and you handled the flashbacks very well.

"The Little Mermaid" is my favorite story ever, and I always love finding stories that retell it. This is a good thing you have started, and I hope you'll keep it going and update soon!

~EmmBee