I enjoyed this chapter a lot. Though my question is when will things sorta start moving. At least in the direction of moving the plot along to where they get back to civilization unless they were transported back to the promised land again. In that case have Holland come find them :D. As Renton did blow a hole in his ships docking bay ;).

Only mistake I found was this.
U: The clime of the beach was temperate,
Correct: The Climate of the beach was temperate

I look forward to your next chapter.

Ja Nee

-Ashi

Cute is all I can say. Young love! Anyways you could have added chapter 2 into chapter 1 to make it longer then Chapter 2 could have been them trying to find where they are at and start traveling back to home. Where ever they are.

Anyways nice job on the story. You seem to be real good with the lovey dovey scenes. Which I gotta ask. Age and are you a female? Cause if your female then well just natural for them. If you a guy then damn your good with stories and wording things right.

Well you did say Berate it so.

1st: The air brushed his locks lightly around his face, but the feeling of plummeting was not present.
Reader Q: Did you mean. The air brushed her locks lightly around his face, but the feeling of plummeting was not present.

Other then that your choice of words were perfect. The mood that was set perfect. Their personality's perfect. I couldn't find a thing wrong except for what I mentioned above. The length though could have been a bit longer but with how good it started I can't complain about the length too much.

Wow, this story is very well written, I cannot wait for another chapter. Your grammar is flawless, and the story is enthralling.

This is a good story. Please continue. Renton and Eureka forever.

Fantastic! The descriptions are very moving and very beautiful.

The chapters a little short though, and with some transition, these three chapters could easily qualify as one. But you did cut 'em off in proper places, so at least it wasn't awkward.

But they're very beautiful. Please continue!