|Reviews for Illogically in Love|
| Sensara 8/12/12 . chapter 8
This story made me happy. Thank you so much for writing this wonderful piece!
| Sensara 8/12/12 . chapter 7
Yay! This dance scene was sensuous. Me gusta!
| Sensara 8/12/12 . chapter 5
Poor Spock. Hope he can find a solution. Again, wonderfully written.
| Sensara 8/12/12 . chapter 4
Yes I liked this chapter! Good job, wonderfully written, and I love that Spock is so darn jealous!
| alylamb2011 5/6/11 . chapter 5
i like how you slowly reveal Spock's human side and have him discover it
| alylamb2011 5/5/11 . chapter 1
you have a true gift with words
i feel like i'm in and a part of another worldwhen i read this
| southernbelle08 1/10/11 . chapter 8
Squee! I loved every minute of this!
| Isolde Jansma 6/12/10 . chapter 8
You have a nice style, and this is a sweet idea, but in need of a beta to look it over as there are areas that could have done with greater development - and a modicum of editing. I was, however, really pleased to find a new Spock/Chapel story to read as they are pretty few and far between and this has always been one of my favourite 'ships. Kudos for that. :)
Anyhoo, I hope you don't mind, but I have picked out a few errors you might want to take a look at.
The establishment was decorated tastefully, if not a bit dramatically to (for) his more conservative tastes. It seemed tailored mostly towards couples /then/ (than) what (delete) might have (been) expected a renowned officers club to cater towards. - This is a shocking sentence, grammatically, and could be rewritten rather better e.g. It seemed tailored so it would cater for couples, secluded booths and dimmed lights heightening the intimate atmosphere, something he had not expected from a renowned officers club.
"May I cut in?" He inquired simply… - In dialogue, if you lead with it in a sentence, and you use ‘said’, ‘asked’, ‘inquired’ etc then the rule is a lower case and no capitalisation e.g. “May I cut in?” he inquired. Direct speech from a character is always written this way, and another example of dialogue that you need to address is:
"Of course Mister Spock! My pleasure." He replied, - The rule here is a comma ALWAYS at the end of the dialogue, “Of course, Mr. Spock. My pleasure,” he replied…
But despite this her eyes remained steady and strong, /broaching/ him no reprieve and giving him the impression that despite their internal admissions, she needed more concrete proof of his feelings, something more /then/ what had /ready/ been 'said'. Yowch… That is a tangled thing right there and it's not clear what you meant from the sentence, plus I think the word you should have used is ‘reproach’. Also, please check the meaning of ‘than’ and ‘then’ – I beta for a few Americans and this is a common oversight.
| NinjaNote 2/23/10 . chapter 8
That was an awesome chapter, and AMAZING story! I loved it! Keep writing and following those rabid plot bunnies _
| NinjaNote 2/23/10 . chapter 1
Excellent first chapter. I am very impressed with the way the wording and sentence structure was used. The descriptions were very good, and I can't wait to read the other chapters.
| RawenclawBabe 1/9/10 . chapter 8
Great story - I really enjoyed reading it!
| randomchick1995 11/20/09 . chapter 7
Well, for one I love the way you had Spock's internal conflict and I ABSOLUTELY fell in love with the mind meld love confession thing.
| randomchick1995 11/19/09 . chapter 8
OMGSH. This is officially the BEST Spock chapter I've ever read. It's amazing and incredible. Wow. Spock is amazing!
| GOKOA 11/16/09 . chapter 8
| Rein Elanor 7/28/09 . chapter 8
I think the part that stands out for me is the image of Spock following just behind Christine as she walks through the Enterprise.