Not bad at all-I personally think that this story has greatly enriched the main plot.

Wow, you update fast. Still good, great tension, but I did notice a few weird typos. Other than that, the writing's great.

Huh. Very well written. I'm afraid I haven't much to go on from that- I never actually played the game, just watched others, and I remember little of the plot. But, if nothing else this is a well-written adaptation, which is rare of itself. I can't wait for the next part.