this is an incredible idea, i really can't wait to see you expand on it... you have such a good handle on the characters. i eagerly await the next chapter!

Ah this is a great idea and I hope you expand on it! Kratos/Anna always was one of my favorite pairings, and I've yet to see them done really well, in a way I really like.

But to be honest, the writing in this piece isn't up to your usual standard. It's a little upsetting. There's tense shifts and dangling participles all over the place, and a lot of phrases just feel...kind of weak.

I sincerely hope you get the chance to get this project rolling sooner rather than later. n.n

I loved the switch in POV, how their thoughts echoed each others. And how the emotional energy built from sadness to anguish hitting every point in between. It is always so lovely when a story can draw you in on an emotional level.

I think you have a nice handle on the characters and can not wait to see how you flesh out Anna. Kratos seems to be holding true to form as well.

This was almost too much of a tease! Just enough to excite interest and leave you wanting more (which is the point, I know). I look forward to your future work in this fandom - going by this snippet it should prove to be truly excellent.