Good job with this!

brilliant!

I love this - exactly my perception of the relationship as well. The characterisation is spot on :)

Hey ) Good little one off, love! Although, i must say, i have different views on the reasons for Bill's behaviour, i still think you wrote this beautifully!

Keep up the good writing!

X.

This is beautiful! Downright poetic! Very 'pleasant' to read (related to the flow) and a very good style!

Keep it going and let us read more of your works! ;-)

This was brilliant; you really got under the skin of both the characters and gave great thought and depth to what you wrote. You explained how they both feel and why, and in such exquisite language too.

Superbly well done. )

You also gave Bet a voice and fleshed out her character a little; that was brilliant as well as she's so often overlooked.

Great job; I'd love to see more from you.