I absolutely love sarge and fillmore and strip so thanks for putting them in there =D anyway, great chapter, really funny xD

I'm so sorry I didn't beta read this one. I wish I could have, for I do see some mistakes. Like you refer to Sheriff as Sarge in one sentence. XD At least I realized who you were talking about. ;)

This chapter was so hilarious! I died laughing! XD And I thought I recognized the "tires like a yeti" thing! The way you described Doc's anger sounds like me! XD Which is a good thing. I'm so much like him, just filled with youthful energy. And I knew they were gonna be in deep trouble!

I see Grey told Strip and Tex about Chick's depression. I'm not sure to take that as a good thing or a bad thing just yet. I'll have to read more to find out. Which I will be doing. I'm your beta. ;)

Wow! Somehow I think of Lightning using the same tone of voice in, "Oh, you are so paying for a new paint job." that he does when he first meets Sally. He's a good racer, though like Sarge said, I can't imagine him being all that great of a physical fighter; he's better with words then he is at throwing punches. He seems to be holding his own against Chick, though.
Man! Now everyone's in it! Fighting on the opposite team as a forklift doesn't seem to be a good idea. Sheriff can sure slap those boots on! I can sort of visualize him practicing when Radiator Springs was hidden from the rest of the world.
I can't wait to see what Strip has to say to the two of them in the next chapter!

Wonderful! I like how you dedicated a section of this chapter to the haulers and their personalities. It seems logical to me that the trucks would put aside the fierce rivalry between their racers, at least for a little while, and tell stories in the infield. My, some of the stories they share! I can see Mack using his association with Lightning to get himself out of all types of tight situations.
Lightning made me smile; he's such a dramatic, flashy car that it's not hard at all to imagine him moaning in non-existant pain! It's also like him to go up to Chick and say something so typically uncouth- little did he know that it was very much the wrong time to try and needle Chick. I'm very curious to see what happens to both the race cars, as well as seeing if Danny is able to recover. Cheers!

Poor, foolish Ken... why did you have to open your big mouth! I was worried that he was going to say something about Chick deliberately losing races, so at first I thought he made a good save, but it was not to be. Mack's story was very amusing, and it reminded me that Mack (in the movie) is actually kind of a wise guy who might just do something like that, so nice touch. :)

This is a very strong chapter, I'm eating popcorn as I watch some of the plot points develop. You manage to make Lightning a well-rounded character who has real friends, but he's still a total jerk. I want to believe that he overheard more of Doc and Sheriff talking than he let on, but he STILL had to make that comment to Chick?! Not that I'm complaining, story-wise, I love Chick vs. Lightning rivalry! Your set-up with Lightning busting Chick and his crew chief discussing the accident was very entertaining drama.

Ever since you introduced Chase, you've had me very curious about what happened to him/with him, and why it's so upsetting to Chick. I was emotionally moved by the injured Chick coming to, the confrontation with Marv, and Chick almost immediately trying to find Danny Dunes. This story is really getting good, please post the next chapter soon!

Sheriff!! Another favorite movie character of mine, and boy do you know how to write him. :D Sheriff calling Doc an "old harpy" was hilarious -- and it totally plays into how you've written them, squabbling like old friends who know each other too well. You also write a very strong Doc, who is a character that everybody loves, but I rarely see him written with the kind of humor and avuncular gruffness that Paul Newman gave to the character in the movie. Doc's gentle mockery of Chick in chapter one was extremely in-character. Doc might not approve of many of Chick's ways, but he's compassionate and wise.

In my actual chapter one review, I remarked about how much I loved your young Chick... even though child!Chick is not *in* chapter one. Whoops! I was getting ahead of myself because some my most treasured lines from your story are in chapter two. "Chick, still young and small, peered at his brother from a distance" unfailingly gives me big wavering anime eyes. It's like one big explodefromcute, from little Chick bouncing on his tires (I can SO picture that!), to the heartwarming memory of Chase restraining his upset little brother. The juxtaposition of that particular flashback with the impending doom of a crash was very intense.

Since you left a note on this chapter that sounds as if you're worried about Too Many Original Characters, I for one think that you're using OCs in a balanced and appropriate way. They give depth to the canon characters, and none of them are, ahem, scenery-chewing characters with excessive descriptions of their fascinating paint jobs and sparking eye colors and whatnot. I'm looking forward to future appearances from any of the family and associates you've provided for Chick!

I'm enjoying this story a lot, so I should probably leave some reviews to encourage you to continue. :) Some lines in the first chapter really grabbed my attention, like "the one time he did manage to win, he was now nearly drowned in the King’s shadow." That's a great way to sum up Chick's "victory" in the Piston Cup, and very poetic. I always like stories that provide Chick with more of a backstory (and family and friends), and I really really like how you're focused on the AFTERMATH of Chick wrecking Strip Weathers.

I love Chick stories, period, but it seems like stories set after the events of the movie rarely deal with the obvious negative consequences of Chick's decisions, and how that affects him personally. Having Chick's sponsors force him to keep a low profile and deliberately lose until he's an "underdog" that the public will embrace is brilliant -- it really plays like the kind of shady, back room deal that HtB would cook up! The scenes with young Chick were also very heart-wrenching.

I love the jokes and stories being traded between the semis. Proves that even though their racecars are rivals, they can still be friends. And that's something I never see!

The scene with Lightning, Sheriff, and Doc was hilarious! "The pain! Make it stop!" I was rolling on the floor laughing! And then when the pain suddenly went away! More laughing! XD

Doc has a great attention to detail in those races. He was able to watch it over and tell that Chick was depressed and caused the wreck. If I were a racecar driver, I'd want a crew chief like him.

The scene with Chick on the lift, that was, I can't think of a single word to describe it! It was so amazing to see Chick so concerned about possibly killing someone on the track! It's something that you never see from Chick, and shows that he's not all that bad of a guy.

When Lightning got to Chick, oh, I was all freaked out as to what happened! Chick had rammed into Lightning! What's gonna happen next!

Awesome story ;) can't wait to read more!

I LIKED THAT LITTLE JOKE LIGHTNING DID TO SHERIFF THAT WAS FUNNY:)

Wow, this Chapter came out better than the last. The interaction between Lightning and Sheriff was in character for them. The characters of yours in Chick's flashbacks are well developed, even for just being introduced. That wreck in the end, I feel that we will not see Danny Dunes again.

I loved the first scene with Lightning taunting the poor Sheriff. I can see Lightning doing something like that.

The flashbacks Chick had were great! I never knew Chick's father seemed to hate him. And they showed how Chick wanted to become a racer. Which I feel is an important topic to cover.

And the wreck! Now that was horrible! And by the sounds of it, Lightning got caught up in it! No! What's gonna happen next!?

Every detail is very well thought out, and it feels as though the characters are, well, in character! I like how you brought out Ken, and how you've molded him; he seems like the perfect foil for grumpy, irritated Chick, yet the two get along well. I am also curious to discover why Chick is suddenly in such demand around the garage! In short, I hope to see much more of this story in the future.

I like the detail you've put into this, from Lance of Hostile Takeover Bank's reaction to the event at the Piston Cup tiebreaker, to Chick's deep rooted shame which he is forced to hide.

Ken sounds amazingly lovable and, much like Mack is to Lightning, a driver that really does care for his client and feels for him. He is probably the support system that Chick would need at a time like this in his career. I can just imagine his puppy dog face! Not to mention, the part where he hid behind Ken to stay away from Doc was hilarious!

There are some widely held beliefs by Chick lovers and writers alike, and you've got them dead on as well. You're not the first to allude to the fact that Chick and his father had an abusive relationship. There must be something in his character that indicates he didn't grow up in a good family environment, he's a southern boy who grew up with tough love.

I just read your last comment at the bottom - if you need a beta reader I would be happy to beta read for you.

Sarah

This looks like it could be very good and I like to read more. Will give a better review once I seen where this story is going.