o.O interesting more please ^_^ kill the damn crazy woman

Please please PLEASE! update this story! We (I) need to find out what happens next! This is SO good!

Liz

...wai~

This is well-written, and and... gosh. It has Arf. ARF!

I want to see more of the delicious angst you've set up here. Please continue...

A good start. I like the pacing and interaction. :-)

great opener, update soon

You never cease to amaze me with the amount of Fate angst you can fit in your fics. I knew it was Precia. Man this story had me up in my seat. I think the sketches done by Laikaken made the story a lot more intense. I could just see the faces. Can't wait for the next chapter!

That's absolutely AWESOME!

I absolutely love this story! The drama and angst caused by Precia returning is wonderful. :D Nanoha being all protective of Fate was rather cute, and the end part about Precia noticing the bond between Nanoha and Fate, and the implication that she'll somehow use that to her advantage was ftw really. I love me some angst. I'll be eagerly awaiting your next update! :)

Especially liked how the front part conveyed the desperation felt by Fate. Dream though it be, if I were to have such a dream as described, I'd wake up panting and sweating.

I also enjoyed the weaving of tenderness into the story. Nanoha and Fate, and Chrono and Fate. Feels like a breath of fresh air when these appear, and then we're plunged into action and chaos again.

Yum.

I hate that bitch of a mother, Precia doesn’t deserve to be called “mother”, rather a monster.

At least we could say she’s plotting something to get Fate back as her tool like she used to be; a slave to get what she wanted. It would be interesting to know your theory of how Precia is back from the dead (yeah, I know she technically disappear alongside Alicia) to bring Fate worst nightmare back.

I’ll follow you on this story.

Mwahahaha I'm currently liking it so much. <33 Please Update soon =D

You've certainly got an interesting premise. The whole image of drowning, glass cages, and overall sense of foreboding brought the feel of desperation and fear across very well.
Speaking of the glass cage of swirling green... That was what Fate was born in, was it not?

Anyway, the moment between Nanoha and Fate was cute. You had me grinning when Nanoha wouldn't let Fate apologize.

But the line, "Her lips felt strangely empty." felt off to me. I think it's the use of the word 'empty.' It doesn't quite fit here. Maybe 'lonely' or perhaps even 'deprived'?

Everything looks great so far. Though the mere mention PreciaFate made me shudder, and I can't tell if you were joking or not... And no, even if I know everything will end up NanoFate, it doesn't make it any better. XD

To end off, my favourite line here was, "Chrono’s gaze met Fate’s, and his eyes softened. For that moment, it was no longer Admiral and Enforcer, but brother and sister."
With me being me, I think you already know why that was my favourite line. XDD

Keep up the good job! And welcome back. ;D

this was very exciting. good emotions played out...i hope that you continue!! and give some background of their situation/friendship (NF). well, the story could end with fate finally facing her fears of her mother and defeating precia again with nanoha.. please cont!!

I EXPECT ALICIA/FATE! NOT PRECIA/FATE!

But YAY NANOFATE SLEEPING TOGETHER! And protective!Arf, concerned!Chrono-nii-chan and awesome!Bardiche are awesome. XD

"Her lips felt strangely empty."
^That sentence sounds pretty weird, perhaps it would do better to replace empty with something like exposed or bare?

And I'll try to write up something with more sense when I'm more awake. 8D

Very nice.

(Though if you make it PreciaFate I will Divine Buster you into the farthest reaches of Hell. >_>)

Beta offer's still open, by the way; and I actually have some time now.