Loved this, it was really sweet _
Can you continue writing it as a story? I love it!

Adorable!

so freakin cuuuuute! .

lol very nice job! :D

kawaii! i lv mxn! good for a first fic. u got their personality captured really well martata x

this is the best fanfiction I have ever read!(This and another one called "broken" with mello and near) I really hope you can continue with this one 3 or make more fanfics with melloxnear. to be honest, i had to pause really often to catch my breath, this story was truly awesome *GRIN* how did you learn to write that well? My heart where beating like crazy! I can imagine near laugh softly and mello trying to find the right words while blushing like crazy, I simply loved this fanfic, thank you very much 3

This is a really cute story! I love the pairing...and this is great for a first fanfic.

awe :3 its fluffy! i liked it!

This was cute. The one sentence in the first paragraph seemed like a run-on to me, but otherwise it was a great first fic. And you don't suck at writing at all, some people can't even establish ideas on paper. You did fine. There were a few minor errors, but they were minor. Everyone makes some errors. I liked it. Short and Sweet. Perfect. I hope to find you again when something else inspires you to write. Have a great day. X3