*jaw drops* An eye collector?!? Ho-lee... That's just...ew. *gags* I think I see now why Roy was being so extra cautious about Ed staying safe indoors, aside from the obvious that is. When Ed said something about this boy having vivid green eyes I instantly became afraid for Ed. Ed has spectacular eyes, imo, and rare golden eyes like his are guaranteed to attract the attention of this freak. Oh man, not good. :(

I noticed you used marks as the monetary unit for the price of the art piece Hakuro bought. It stood out to me because the canon monetary unit of Amestris is the cenz. No big deal tho. It was just one of those things that made me go, "Oh look, another reference to our world!" :)

It amused me greatly to see Hakuro being made a fool of! I really liked that! :D Another thing I thoroughly enjoyed was Ed demanding to be the sole heir of Roy's books! XD Nice to see Ed has his priorities straight! LOL Watching Ed argue down his stodgy teacher was so much fun! The old stick in the mud deserved to have his cage rattled for saying Ed was reading too many fairy tales! :P What kind of teacher talks down to a student like that? jerk. Loved this line, "Besides, you only said I couldn’t terrorise the children; you didn’t say anything about terrorising the adults". :D

Can't wait to read more!!

Amazing as always, I love your writing style so much, its descriptive and believable and you pay attention to every detail and aspect and the way you develop their relationship and closeness is superb. You have an amazing talent and I hope you continue writing this story till the end, I do hope Al comes in soon though, I'm sure his worried...

Other than that I have no other comment (Mabuhay to you ^^)


(On another note are you planning to continue Concerto? I love that story as well and hope you do)

This story is so great so far! I really like the characterizations and the gradual closeness of Ed and Mustang. My only gripe: Where's Al? I'm sure you'll bring him in eventually, but he must be worried :( Other than that, really, just amazing. The attention to detail with all the fancy meals and wine is stellar. I adore the idea of Ed in classy clothes and I can totally see Mustang in an extravagant house and owning half the town. Can't wait for the next chapter!

hey, i really enjoy this story(book?). Could you please update again soon please? wow. that was repetitive

This is very well written and descriptive. You put good notes at the end to explain it too, good job! I really like your writing style, mainly because it's so in depth without being overwhelming. Keep up the excellent work!

Wow, this is good, very much so. I'm going to stay tuned alright? Keep up the fantastic work Iluxia and Aventria! You have me hooked. ;)

Peace out!

Awesome story you have here, and pretty original to boot.

But I have to be honest...you have a few rather glaring mistakes. For instance, Automail rehabilitation usually takes about three YEARS, not six months. That's why it was such a big deal that Ed finished within one year in the series.

There are a few more inaccuracies like that that I think you should ferret out, but your story itself is quite good.

O! I like! I just really hope you don't take as long with your next chapter. :)

Is finding the culprit really going to be as easy as the military looking up library logs, though? For anything to do with Edward Elric, that seems too simple...unless he's going to get into trouble in the time it takes the others to search, anyway.

The school scene was funny (I see the point about him having to have seen the one boy), but his socialization is a good point. You mentioned him going to a university--I hope that wasn't just for filler space and that he really will get a chance to go. After all, I'd like to see him hold his own against the "experts" there. :D

By the way, did your LJ post have the actual transmutation circles in it that Ed was just looking at when he was trying to figure out the link between the eight of them? If so, I'd like to look at them for myself, but the LJ site doesn't like me. :( A direct link will work better than me trying to find the right page. Thanks!

I am so happy to see another chapter! This story is so awesome! I absolutely adore how you portray Edward charater and I love the Gate piece personality! And, of course, the chapter is great. Wonder, who is the murderer? Update soon!

aww ed helped out on the case. i cant wait 4 more love how he and roy are having such a nice relationship, cute
*~ashley~*

aw, so ** good! so many things happened in this capter LOL and in the end ed was really useful! ^_^
i'm so happy you updated this, please udate soon !
(this and your other stories )

nicely done! ^__^
I couldnt stop reading

Gah, this story just gets better and better. So much happened in this chapter - I never wanted it to end! I loved Ed's scholastic experiences... it would be just like Roy to take him seriously in that. And just like Ed to royally screw the teachers over... to put it bluntly. Haha, I really, really do love their developing relationship. Those two, teamed up against the world rather than fighting against each other... they really could take down anyone.

And you write Ed's ego with aplomb, and I love every second of it. There was a brilliant line in this chapter, just stuck in amongst all the blood and gore... I was laughing for ages. "Ed knew he was /that/ awesome." He's brilliant, but Ed really needs to be taken down a notch, or he's going to be dangerous. Especially with Mustang's whole team standing around, gobsmacked at his genius. That sounds like a recipe for disaster - but a fantastic scene.

In my last review (too long ago!) I was considering the changes to Ed's psyche, and I realised they're all very well thought out and considered. However, I've been thinking about Roy now... why, exactly, has Roy not made any attempt at getting Ed into the military? In the manga/anime, the first thing he thought of was the boost to his career that drafting such a gifted genius could bring. In this story, it barely ever seems to cross his mind. Just wondering... was there any particular reason for that? Not that the protectivity isn't in-character too, but it's just such a drastic change and I can't see an obvious conclusion as to why.

Oh, and I really love the Xerxian theory! More more more! It's fascinating, and I can tell it's going to have something to do with the plot. This brilliant brilliant plot that I can't get enough of. I've re-read this fic twice already - that's not healthy! Thank you so much. Every new chapter just makes my day, and I don't even have to wait that long usually. You two are geniuses. You're giving Ed a run for his money.

Someone made a great point in another review... please don't tell me the murderer's going to go after Ed's beautiful eyes? Agh... Barry the Chopper all over again. I suppose I did say he needed to be taken down a notch, but... eek.

Sorry for the ramble. Take it as a sign of my appreciation! No, my worship! Thank you so much! I'm eagerly awaiting the next update, hope it won't be long! <3

Wah - I'm addicted to this story even though it's only at it sixth chapter! Truly well thought out and planned - I don't recall reading anything else that can best this in those terms. This was the thing that made my day (: Can't wait for the next one XD

AWSOME chapter!I LOVE this story! I cant wait to read more and hope I can SONN!Your AWSOME!