Hey there Im not trying to be rude when I say this but, I couldnt help notice if your story was a script for a play or an actual story. I was sitting there pondering what to make of this. Now personally I think the story could have used a little more detail,descriptive language and everything not to happen so fast in one clash. But you can write however you want. It's your type of writing style. But other than that I enjoyed the story. Thank you for taking your time to read this, I really appreciate it! :) (Again just to tell you I'm not trying to tell you what to do or be rude.). ;)

Hey um im not trying to be Rude when i say this but, writing kind of had me lost when I began reading it. I thought "Is this person writing a book or writing some type of a script for a play?" I had no clue. Now personally I thought It needed more descriptive language like a story would normally have. I would just like to give you a few ti

it's awesome. whens the next chapter?

This story is ok so far. Please tell me when it will be updated. And if you would like help with some random thing, don't be afraid to ask me; I won't mind.