 loessar 2009-12-07 . chapter 20 Wow!! I was laughing when Eddie realizes what would happen if he told Meg the truth. They are growing stronger as a couple. It looks like Lois is jealous. Can't wait for the next chapter. |
 Hotstreak's crossover stories 2009-12-06 . chapter 20Great chapter update soon p.s I believe you your not racist |
 loessar 2009-11-28 . chapter 19 This was fantastic!! I loved it when Chris got bashed. The switching of the genders was the best. I was cracking up. Bertram and Ellie were a better team with Stewie on this one than Brian. This was better than the original. I can't wait for the next one. |
 Hotstreak's crossover stories 2009-11-27 . chapter 19That was when funnier the first Multiverse episode,I can't wait for your next update." |
 loessar 2009-11-22 . chapter 18I loved this and I loved the Terminator movies. The part I love was future Meg was fighting in baby dolls and was called hotter than Lois. Peter sleeping with future Meg cracked me up and calling Lois the b word cracked me up more. I can picture this and I hope you do more parodies. |
 Bhaalspawn 2009-11-22 . chapter 18Just as a note, you might want to stop putting such an emphasis on who voices these characters. It detracts from their personality a bit.
Besides, if anyone is reading a Virtual Season to themself, they are probably reading the main characters (Eddie in this case) with their own normal voice... or at least I am.
Good chapter anyway, and congratulations on nearing breaking 70,0 words (only 800 words away so it counts, damn you!) |
 Hotstreak's crossover stories 2009-11-22 . chapter 18I still believe Peter slept with his daughter from the future.I best Lois is gonna fit if she finds out especially Eddie." |
 loessar 2009-11-13 . chapter 17Michael came back was hysterical. I love it when Megs' body changed and the fight between Eddie and Micheal. It was like Batman and the Joker. Keep it up. |
 Hotstreak's crossover stories 2009-11-12 . chapter 17Great story I especially liked the part where Peter slams that robber's head against the fire extinguisher |
 loessar 2009-11-07 . chapter 16 Great chapter!! It was funny to see Peter trying to crash Carters' party. Keep it up. |
 Hotstreak's crossover stories 2009-10-31 . chapter 16GOOD CHAPTER |
 Bhaalspawn 2009-10-16 . chapter 15This was actually pretty funny. Your spelling and grammer are getting better, you just need to work on your choice of words in some situations.
Here's an example: When one character says someone is a totally freak, it would actually be "This person is a TOTAL freak."
But keep up the good work, not bad considering your language barrier. Also, i apologize about freaking out at you in my last review, I didn't know English was a new language for you. |
 Rocket6923 2009-09-21 . chapter 8I'm pretty sure I was able to follow this, but you should submit your work to a betareader before submitting your work to the general public. A betareader can help you greatly improve your grammar.
Also you wrote "She says he threats her like crap" when you should have written "She says he treats her like crap." The word is spelled t-r-e-a-t-s and not t-h-r-e-a-t-s. There are several other spots in the story where this misspelling occurs. |
 aldovas 2009-09-03 . chapter 12It's a shame to review my own fanfic, but I waited DAYS to someoene review me...but NOTHING! Maybe my fanfic is not so good than the others... |
 Nayuni 2009-08-24 . chapter 11 I think my favorite part of this chapter was Eddie's reaction to singing again.
Wow, that Heather is a B-I-T-C-H |