um, some of the words and grammer don't really make sense. it is a great plot though. maybe you should search for a beta-reader, or a close friend/fellow author, so they can check your grammer for you. it would make your story a little better,though it is already pretty good.

I hope the guy doesn't take her! >.>

Oh noes! They saw her! sorry, I haven't been on lately. ^.^

i like it but im kinda confused is she like from holloween town whiches

Interesting, so what is it that Clara is sending Alex? Who is Will? Oh, can't wait for the next chapter! :D

The story is very interesting, I would love the read more but there's only one chapter :D hehe. If you want I can help you with some mistakes, :) don't take it the wrong way, I have my share too. XD Either way I hope you continue with this story.