I don't find your character Sueish, I find him to be a very endearing character if not an interesting one. Also I don't think your chapters are painfully long either, keep in mind that this is your fic and you should write it how you want so don't worry too much about what others think okay? :) You always write very well developed chapters and it's a shame others on this site can't do the same, I am eager now to see how you handle this fic now that it's in motion. This should prove very interesting in deed. :3

Spice- it takes a real man to wear perfume. XD

Well, I do remember saying that Spice was sort of like a Sue in your rough draft, but really, he wasn't a brain-numbing Sue. But now that you've made sure to show that he isn't well-received by absolutely everyone (abbess-lady doesn't count because she seems to dislike everyone anyways), I'm liking him better now. Your description of the feast was excellent and started up a crave of cheesecake for me. Thanks a lot. -_-;

Anywho, I think my favorite character so far would have to be Fender the rabbit. He seems to be a more down-to-earth character that seems to think the most logically. Also, what intrigues me is Spice's past itself. Geography was never been my strong point, so I have no clue where he hails from. At first, when it was mentioned how his accent sounds almost like a song, I was thinking that maybe it was Scotland or Ireland or something like that. Love their accents, but then you mentioned that the climate is warmer, so now I have no idea still. Ah well. I'm sure you'll reveal all in good time. And let's not forget our vixen and marten friend. My guess is that they're probably from the same place as Spice. However, I still have yet to find out what they want with him. Why is he so important? Judging from the way he juggled all those things and did all those circus acts, he sounds like an entertainer. But does she really want an entertainer that bad? Is she really that bored? Or maybe there's more to Spice than what I think. Perhaps he stole her perfume and ran away with it? XD Nah. More like, I think that she might have wanted to make a coat out of his fur.

There's a lot of mystery in this chapter and I'm glad you trimmed it down a bit. There were some little errors here and there- probably due to inserting/deleting phrases and words and the whole mix-up you can have with that. Don't worry. It happens. ;)

Keep 'em coming!

~Jade TeaLeaf

If written well enough, a long chapter can still be very enjoyable to read, and this one certainly fits that. In fact, I hardly noticed it's length; too engrossed with the story. It's really two to three chapters in one, anyway.

I also don't know what Jade's getting at when she said that Spice is sue-ish. To me, he seems quite the opposite. Although, I suppose Jade would have more experience in that matter, so I guess my thoughts don't apply too well. :|

Some theories about Spice's origin, tho nothing solid yet. I might just have to research some mustelids to search for clues. Speaking of which, I have some theories about that as well, but again, nothing definite. :-\.

Uh...beyond that, I don't think i have anything to add that isn't already obvious about this chapter. So, in short, good job, and looking forward to more. :)

I love this story so far, and i cannot wait for the next chapter

Boy it sucks to be this poor lead character of yours but at least he has found help, it is really suspenseful that we don't know much about him other than that he smells good. This chapter has really grabbed my attention and I am looking very forward to more of this fic as it unfolds. I've never read any of the Redwall books but by the looks of this fiction it makes me wish I had. :) You have never failed to please honey and I am eagerly awaiting more of your works. :3

A mustelid is a general name for the family of animals including weasals, ferrets, and otters. The name made me curious enough to wikipedia it. Are you going to identify the mustelid more specifically later? Most people have no idea what a mustelid is.

This sounds as if it's going to be a very interesting story. As for the odd unnamed creature, I've got a guess on what he is. Grammer's good and the charactors sound very interesting. Continue writing please!

I'm curious about this mustelid. I figured in the beginning of the chapter that he wasn't a half-breed, as it didn't really seem to fit, and I'm pleased to see I was right. Can't for the life of me identify his exact species, though.

Anyway, good read, looking forward to more. :)

Interesting in premise and well-written. I think I'll be keeping an eye on this story.
I like your characterization best of all at this point. Nobody (or should I say nobeast?) feels like a cliche or a copy - I can see a certain amount of personality in almost all of them. The only exception is our nameless mystery, and that's only because of his delerium.
Which was also well written.

I'm liking this. :)

Happy writing
Oreramar

You're very welcome, Watson. :)

Well, I have a pretty good idea at what this creature is, mainly because I nearly ran over one with my bike about a week ago. At first I thought it was a weasel, but after some research I realized what it was. Cute little critters, they are. :)

Erm... definitely an improvement from the last chapter, though one thing continuously seemed to bother me. Mainly it was the fact that through all of Nurse Abe's dialogue, he seemed to be "squeaking" all the time. And not to mention, "nurse" is a title because it's a specific character, so it should be capitalized.

But enough nit-picking from me.

I certainly give kudos to the nice shrew that volunteered to help erm... whatshisspecies. Also, Wiomi seems to be an interesting character. I sense maybe some interspecies relationship looming ahead here? Maybe? Just to warn you, some people might not approve, but I'm okay with it. Have some imagination, people. I mean, love shouldn't just stop at a species, should it? True love conquers all! >:D

Oh wait... wrong smiley... <3 There.

I look forward to finding out what this "Red Hazard" guy is. For some reason, I can't help but keep thinking about Red Bull whenever I see that name. Oh well, I'll get over it eventually. It's just a little quirk of mine.

Also, I'd like to find out who this creature is, where he came from, and what his story is. I'm sure it is an interesting one.

Great chapter and I do hope that you continue. :)

~Jade TeaLeaf