I love this fanfic. I am 19 and i love the series. I feel wierd when my friends see the books cuz they all say they are children's books, i mean they are, but i love them.

hey!! ok, so i realized anonymous review is the only way i can give u mi ideas for WHY Amoret is "the chosen one" (lol, i imagine Dumbledore saying the whole "chosen one" thing... it's random, but funny) without waiting for the next chapter. and my idea is this:

Amoret saw her parents die when Harken cursed their house. Amoret was the only one in it and Harken locked her in. Then he cursed the house and he explained the curse to Amoret (from the outside). He then unlocked it and left because he knew she was already cursed. Then a while later, Amira came home from the marketplace (u can change marketplace. I only used that cuz Amira is like Alice and Alice likes to SHOP! lol). They then warned off all the servants and everything to leave, so that couldn't get cursed either. And then Amoret and Amira were stuck in the house alone for 2 years and then came Amadis surprised them, and they couldn't warn him, so he got cursed as well. anyway, i no that probably didn't give the whole reason, but the idea for why it's Amoret is she was the [first one cursed]... ha, that rhymed!

And could be Cecille sorta pyshic, so she knew Harken was going to do the curse, but that's all she knew (besides what the curse was) and so she got her husband (who could have the endowment of making prophecies) to prophecize a way to save them, and they had this one advisor servant who was actually a double agent (ha-ha, spy movie!! lol) kind of thing, so he/she told Harken, so he told them to suggest the whole "kiss of death" thing to the parents, which they did (and Cecille told Amoret while she [Cecille] was dying), and then the double agent got Harken to do a spell where the they're re-incarnated a million times and born with the knowlegde of the curse and stuff, so they know who to look out for.

Wow... i thought up the whole "Amoret being the first person to be cursed" thing a while ago, but i just made up all these details on the spot... GO ME!!:P) and as for the whole servant person... for some reason, when i thought about that, the first person who came to mind was Dagbert... the second was Joshua... weird... OMG! new idea on the spot (i am on a roll right now):

How about Tancred is not only the boy she loves, but the servent's re-incarnation!! so it's this whole internal struggle with Tancred... kill Amoret (which is what she wants) or kill himself (so the girl he loves can stay alive). -thinks for a second- Wait, Tancred loves Amoret back, right?

And another note... u said the AM's r descended from the original Amoret... that means they're related to Charlie... and that their technically Yewbeams, right? wait, were they related to Amoret from their dad's side, or their mom's? And is their parent from Amoret descended through their mom or dad? srry, i need to ask... besides, if someone else notices this and asks, u'll have an answer ready!!

oh, and for the whole "omg! i wanna do that! plotting, u know what? nvm, not important...", i was thinking bout this girl in mi seventh grade class who was really annoying and i'm like "it would be fun to burn her hair or something" cuz she was always doing wierd things to her hair (not like how Livvie does it... when Livvie does it, it's cool, when the girl from 7th grade does it, she's a freak). Maybe you can have Tracy Morsel try to hit on Tancred and Amoret and Amira see, so Amira tries tofreeze her fingers or something...

as for quotes, this is one i was gonna use 4 mi fanfictions, but wat the heck, i'll give it to u. i'm just changing the name "Melanie" to "Amira" (cuz i can see her doing this... well, i can see Alice doing this, so i'm hoping it's close enough):

Amira: I taught you people the creul ways of the world! Then I turn around for two seconds, and BAM! You guys do something *ethical! It's horrifying! -Walks away-
Emma: I thought Olivia was our resident drama queen.
Charlie: So did I.
Olivia: I still am. Amira's the evil resident drama queen.

*"ethical" is supposed to be in italics. Anyway, i think this is long enough because i'm gonna [give a proper reply to ur review reply in my next review]... the stuff in the [] is sort of a tongue twister!! later, and update!! both this and DMS!!

~May:)

P.S. i had a ff idea today that i'm now OBSESSED with, but i need help... let's say u imagine a girl with the name 'Penelope', do you think of her with black hair, dark brown hair, red hair (like Stacey Faber's hair... look her up if u don't no who she is), bronze (like Edward's), or auburn... if it helps, her eyes are green... it's gonna drive me crazy if i don't figure it out!! :P seriously, ask any of mi friends... they no how obsessive i can be at times!!

P.P.S. Mi story's gonna be put up again soon!! yay!! would you read it when i put it back up? u don't have to, just a quick question...

I'M BACK! Did you miss me?? lol. anyway, the reason i haven't reviewed in FOREVER is cuz i got grounded off the computer (cue person who no's me walking by and freaks out, sayin "OMG! MAY got GROUNDED??" yes... i don't get grounded often... but it wasn't my fault!). Anyway, then mi computer caught a virus and crashed (luckily everything was backed up, so i didn't lose mi stories). Then mi mom & brother had to fix it. Then i got grounded off the computer again for catching the virus... but now, i shall give a proper review for chapter 3, and give a review for chapter 4 and a review for chapter 5. but first... hehe, i have "almost accurate guesses." (for some reason, that makes me giggle...) and yes, mi hair was "prettyful," in ur words. & u should have made Amadis a girl... there's too many guys in Charlie Bone. not enuf girls.:P & i didn't even no wat the redhouse commercial was til u mentioned it, so i looked it up. Yes, i'm actually Asian too (i'm Indian, but that's in Asia, so it probably could be considered Asian), so when I saw no Asian, i'm like "-gasp- dude, don't forget us Asian ppl!!" now, proper review of chap 3. the AM gals are LUCKY they have a protective brother... mine doesn't care... in fact, he's the one who told me i need to get a boyfriend... in front of mi parents... as u can tell, awkward moment. what's weirder is he's 10. but i'll save that story for another time. And don't wrry bout reviewing ur own story, i do that sometimes too, which, btw, it's deleted now. So sad:(. but it wasn't going anywhere. so i'm restarting the whole story & reposting it soon... as soon as mi dad installs MS Word again (comp. crash, remember?) Amira is sorta like Alice. Line that proves it 2 me?
"“So…how did all that work out? What did she tell you? When will I get to find out?”"
There's also the fact that Amira's all bi-polar, like Alice, but i think that's because they're supposed to be careful bout everything, so no offense to ur friend. mi fave line from chap. 3:
"'Who are you? I’m sorry, I forgot to ask.' She said, laughing.
'I’m Lysander Sage. Nice to meet you. Again.'"
I found that funny. Yes, i have a twisted sense of humor. sue me. lol, moving on to chapter 4. first thing to mention: Fave lines. So they are:
"'This should be good. A huge tell-all: Who are the Wellers? Why are they such psychopaths?' he said, pulling out an imaginary notebook and pretending to write in it." Oh, Tanc, don't let the AM's hear u say that!!
"'Miss Ingledew, you don’t mind if we might get your floor a little wet, do you? If we clean if up?' Amadis asked, and everyone stared at him. Amira flushed even redder...
...'Because Amira might…um. I’m not sure how to word this…' Amadis stammered, and Amira sighed again, heavily.
'Because I might accidentally light myself on fire.'" I laughed at this a lot cuz i thought it was something else and then i read the whole "accidently light on fire" line & i'm like "Whoa, that is so crazy!! OMG!! i wanna do that!!" then i started plotting... u no wat?? nvm that. it's not important. moving on...
"'How?' her voice grew dreamy, but not in a delightful way. She was imagining ways to kill. Someone. Herself. Something ancient.
'There is only one way I can die, Emma. I find the boy I love. We kiss. I die.' She barked out a short laugh.
'Kiss of death. What a cliché.' She muttered, striding out of the room. For some unknown reason, everyone felt their eyes sliding to Tancred’s, whose were glued on the door. Somehow, they knew. Oh, they knew." i love how u portrayed that. it makes it sound so mysterious and dangerous and just plain cool. what i don't get though is why Amoret has to die. Why not Amira, or Amadis? I know my review for chap. 4 is short, but it explained a lot of stuff, & it is 3 reviews plus some extra stuff, so i should move on and finish. Anyway, review for chapter 5: mi first reaction when i finished reading the chapter was "OMG!! Amoret's really doing the whole 'keep your friends close and keep you enemies closer' thing." then it was "EWW!! SHE KISSED MANFRED!! i feel much sympathy for the girl." then i felt bad for Dagbert. I just KNOW Amoret's gonna do something to get back at him for trying to drown Tancred. I just KNOW it! and (random thought just occured to me) did u notice, no one ever goes after Olivia... like, with Charlie, he's the leader, so of course the Bloor's are out to get him. with Tancred, Joshua used his magnetism, and Dagbert drowned him. Then there was Emma, who was hypnotised for 8 years. Fidelio got hypnotised too once, in the second book, i think, and he got his house broken into (5th book, when Tolly Twelve Bells was stolen). Then Billy, with his the de Greys, and Lysander in the third book, when Belle/Yolanda destroyed his scuplture of Ollie Sparks. And for Gabe, the fourth book, when Dorcas gives him the bewitched cape. yeah, i no, random, but i noticed, so i'm like "gotta add it." and also, i checked out all ur banners. Amoret's really pretty (from the anime one). i couldn't see the grainy pictures, so i can't say about how she is younger, or Amira, or Cecille. but Amadis... OMG! i thought you were exaggerating cuz he's ur OC, but... OMG! he IS hot!! the banner for DMS is cute. I like it. but I absolutely LOVE LOVE LOVE the banner for Cursed Stranger. i thinkg it's cuz the quotes ("...curses are deadly..." then "...love can re-awaken life..." but u no that already). "Charlie Bone and the Troublesome Trio" is by Ehren Hatten. wanna no how i found it? i searched "Charlie Bone" on google video (cuz i'm not allowed on youtube... -mutters "dummy brother"-) and i saw a vid and it looked interesting and it was actually a vid made by the author of the story that includes drawings of Morgan, Corazon, and Ada. it's sorta a trailer for the story. it's really cool. anyway, i think this makes up for mi lack of reviewing. that and i'm hungry, so i shall go eat now... and i think mi mom's mad @ me 4 being on the computer so long... i don't want to be grounded AGAIN!! anyways, later!

~May :)

E! :D i'll scream with you :D That was FANTASTIC! Soo...is Tancred the boy she loves? Wait WHY does she have to die? WHY?! :( well, UPDATE soon! you have to know that this is FABULOUS! :D

Heh Felix! I love him! and Fido too! I like the involvement of my favourite characters! Keep it up!

Hey, this is a FANTASTIC story! You're a great writer, and this is a really interesting idea! :) :) Sorry I didn't review before, I was reading fanfic in school and the teacher was coming up behind me xD hehe. Well, PERLEEZ continue, this is great! :D

This story's great so far. Keep it up!

First thing i must say... AMADIS? OMG! THESE ARE THE RED KING'S ORIGINAL CHILDREN, AREN'T THEY?!?!?! -actually reads the rest of the chap- nvm... mi new theory: Amoret, Amira, & Amadis are the Red King's great-grandchildren and they're descended from the original Amoret. their Uncle Harken placed a curse on them for whatever reason and they traveled through centuries, either using one of their endowments or the time twister. i wonder how Amoret knew Olivia was endowed. Did Fido actually call out "SOS"?? because THAT is funny. i just thought he was going make signs. And i was wondering how u make SOS signs... lol, anyway, school in Canada ends in June, not May. we only get 2 months off. So mi graduation is today, wish me luck!! yay for Emma/Gabe! poor Amoret, Amadis & Amira, (i'm just gonna call them the AM's now) their parents died. I wonder how Tancred is going to help them. oh, & btw, for DMS, the girl’s name is Kristen, Karen, or Kaitlin, i just no it!! I’m pretty sure it’s Kristen!! & ur right, I would run away, so I guess it wasn’t TOTALLY ouch. & I don’t wonder y she’s not living with her mom. Anyway, this is probably mi shortest review ever cuz mi aunt is outside waitin 4 me so we can leave cuz I have a hair appointment. so, i shall review next time, with a long review. Bye & update!!

I LOVE THIS! I can't believe it hasn't gotten more reviwes yet, it's great!
Gahah, I don't know where to start; first off, Amoret=love, for defo, even though we haven't gotten to know all of her yet!
And and, Felix's band and the whole nightcluv- cannot WAIT to read that chapter! Update update update! I adore your writing style, and I love how you've included all the characters, even Billy and Blessed, instead of just focusing on Amoret etc!
Seriously great story, can't wait to read more!
M x

Aww! poor Gabe!! & Em! Gabriel, it's not nice to push people off log piles. Tsk, Tsk. lol!! I feel like Gabe's mom... kinda creepy cuz Gabe has a sister named Mai... & i go by May on ff... anyway, back on topic: Amoret, you are EXTREMELY confusing... I love how you portray the gang, they seem really normal, like they don't have to deal with all these crazy endowments & such... anyway, fave quotes from this chap (be prepared, there's a lot):

"'That. Was. Weird.' Emma said, gazing back to where Amoret had disappeared. Charlie rolled his eyes. 'No, really?' he said sarcastically, and Emma slapped his arm. 'You suck.' He muttered..." haha!! i do that with mi friends all the time!!

"'Or her skirt.' Olivia offered, snickering. Gabriel rolled his eyes. 'Right…' he said, pushing Olivia off of the pile. She threw her shoe at him. It ricocheted off his head and hit Emma." Once again, poor Gabe & poor Emma!! & once again, tsk tsk, Gabe.

"You know, just because my hair color happens to be blonde, doesn’t mean that I was too dumb to notice her designer suitcase on the bed right next to the window." haha!! Em got u good, Liv! it's funny 2 me cuz in an ff i'm writing, mi OC & Tanc r always arguing & she says "omg, i just had a Tancred moment" & wen everyone stares @ her, she's like "i was gonna say blonde moment, but Emma's like a genius!"

"Tanc, what did you do?" Aww! Everyone instantly assumes Tancred did it... well, i would too...

"'You know what I want to know?' Gabriel asked thoughtfully. 'No.' Charlie said, staring at him." Geez, Charlie, Ouch on Gabe much??

"...It’s creepy. It’s like she’s a female version of Manfred." That IS creepy.

"A much, much, much hotter version of Manfred. And even nastier." True, she would be hotter. & she does seem bitter, but not worse than Manfred... that's hard to accomplish.

“Freaks.” Gabriel muttered, swinging himself up from the log and stretching his legs. Olivia rolled her eyes.

"No, really? That’s odd. You know, it’s kind of funny, how odd that is. A couple of freaks in a school full of freaks. Yeah, that’s really odd, Gabe." yeah, Gabe, a couple of freaks in a school full of freaks, really odd. I love Livvie & Gabe, they act like siblings!

"...and he said that we should come this weekend, you know, kind of like…advertise it…I guess. So what do you say?' he finished, partly out of breath. Olivia looked dreamy and starry eyed. 'Mm…I’d love to go...'" Aww!! Fido/Livvie moment, right there!! YAY!! i don’t even no how it was, but it was, to me at least!!

"...He said they’ve got a really hot new singer.' Fidelio added, widening his eyes like he wasn’t planning something to get them all there. Gabriel’s hand shot up. 'I’m in!'" Honest to God, u make Gabriel so hilarious!! & Fido too! So now you’ve taken all 3 of mi fave characters (Fido, Livvie, & Gabe) & made them hilarious & made me love them even more!

Anyway, i'm guessin the girl Amoret was hugging was her sister, & i'm hoping that the guy was her cousin (since he wasn't her brother) cuz Tancred needs SOMEBODY, & i'm really hoping the guy already has a girlfriend he's totally devoted to cuz Olivia & Emma are RESTRICTED (sp.?) from liking him. It's an actual rule in the rule-books of "Olivia belongs with Fidelio" & "Emma is supposed to be with Charlie or Gabriel"!! lol, please don't make fun of me, i'm already a loser (as u can tell)! the whole idea u told me about the old version of ur story where Fido makes the SOS signs was pretty funny, cuz i can sorta imagine it, but when they're younger & he's sorta just starting to realize he likes Olivia. btw, if you've read Ehren Hatten's fanfic "Charlie Bone & the Troublesome Trio," there's this pic the author drew of Tancred on a website she made just for the story. U should see it, cuz THAT is Tancred being hot!! I guess Tanc would look good with green eyes. i can see it. Btw, who's Emma gonna be with in the story? -hopes it Charlie or Gabe- Oh, & Manfred being hot... -shudder violently- bad mental image much? I think i've been mentally scarred for life. Thanx a lot! jk, but still a bad mental image. Btw, sucks that the character in “Dancing For My Saviour” isn’t named Honey… I was so sure it was… anyway, speaking of the book u told me about, no I haven’t even heard of Rebecca, but it sounds interesting. i’ll look it up in mi public library over the summer, when i’ll have a lot of free time. Maybe I’ll post sum stories to, & the finish the one I’ve started writing, which is for Twilight. i don’t recommend you read it though. It’s pretty bad, & I’ve lost both my muses… & mi sticky notes… where i kept sum of the important stuff for the story. I’m actually taking it down 1st week of summer, but only u, me, mi new beta, & mi friend no that, so shh!! Anyway, back on topic, once again I’ve talked too long & mi mom’s yellin @ me 2 clean mi room so I g2g. Plz update soon & wow, this review is actually just over 2 pgs. Long on MS Word. Bye now!

Hi!! omg, srry for addin the story for faves before reviewing, i was goin to review sooner, but mi thingy got screwed & i couldn't review, but i figured "i can still add it to mi faves" so i did. I really like where this story is going, the only thing that bothers me is that if Lysander & Tancred are 2 years older than the others, so if Olivia, Fidelio, Charlie, Emma, & Gabriel are 15, Lysander and Tancred would be 17, or if Lysander and Tancred are 15, the others would be 13. Just a note to keep in mind. Also, Tancred’s eyes are blue. & i'm guessin Amoret is endowed. i wonder what her endowment is... & i find it cool she's named after the Red King's daughter. She even spells it the same way (the other way to spell Amoret is Amorette) lol, i daydream about Charlie Bone too!! Mainly trying to figure out ways Fido and Liv would get together... cuz i'm a huge loser like that!! btw, i'm guessing this is going to be Tancred/Amoret? Any other couples? I wonder why Amoret ran from Tancred… (Srry, i'm a HUGE romantic!) What I really like about your story is that the chapter is what some people call short, in length anyway, but i find it really descriptive for the length, and it’s long & descriptive enough that the reader won’t get bored readin it, but they still know wat’s going on, and they wonder what’s going to happen. And I now of some stories where i’ll skip out on like half the chapter cuz it’s too much describing and not enough dialogue, but this story evened it out. I love how right now, Amoret is shy and beautiful and mysterious, because she’s probably gonna have a huge secret, and I wanna find out what that is! And I wonder why she ran away form Tancred… my theory is she knows Tancred from somewhere, or she’s looking for Tancred for some reason, and she’s surprised to see him, but Tancred has no idea who she is. Ok, I think this review is long enough & you’ve gotten tired of my babbling, so I’ll go now! Bye, & update soon! I wanna see where this is going, like, REALLY BADLY!