Maybe you could remake this story better. I could tell you a great idea I had in mind if your interested because I think you'll like it.

The story was great, Oi, don't let those jake asses let you down, there just mean people to hard to please, and to the flamers i'm flaming you back fuckers! YOU guys should stop writing your shit lode of a story and get your little asses out of here you hear me? Good, but sorry Auther for the langered there, but anyway the story was great hope you contion this at some other point. Red over and out.

Dang, I love this story its a shame its been discontinued. I love One Piece n Zolo is one cool character

Listen up. You need to continue this.

Newsflash: EVERYONE at SOME POINT in their writing life gets flames. You know what I do? I make marshmellows with them.

Too many people like this story for you to just stop. I've gotten a story that I only got 1 GOOD review. Just delete the flames and keep it moving.

To the flamers: GET A LIFE! Gosh, this is how people get killed by angry writers that you flamed.

P.S. ( To the flamers: If you flame, can you give them to me? I need some more marshmellows.)

Okay it's good but not that believable, if you correct some of the facts and unbelievable parts it would be pretty good.

ps. I am NOT hating, just some advice since it is a good start and needs a little editing.

I thought it was good! w33

hey i liked this alot... and guys consturctive critisim is great and all but theres no need to berate her just beacuse its sounded a little mary-sue ish. To the author if you want help developing your charas pm me

u know, if you actually like your story you shuldnt stop jus coz ppl dont like it, u shuld consider their critiques and mayb change a few things, but dont give up!

Please dont stop because of only 2 haters. the rest actually liked it and will feel pain because you do this.

The fuck is this.

Made of fail, Mary-Sueish character, unbelievable plotlines, and even with an extreme dose of 'suspension-of-disbelief' this story does not make my cut.

Good luck on your next stories, but this is crap.

Look, we really don't need another Mary Sue, Little Miss Perfect OC Story here. Like... at all. Seriously, no one gives a damn about your little fantasy coming to "life" with a Straw Hat character. And I know this isn't a Mary Sue story, mainly because YOU'RE NOT AS PERFECT AS WINTRA CHICK!

Stop typing, stop writing, and leave your love life out of Fanfiction. I might be being mean, but so many of us are thinking it when we read the damn summary/post.

PS. Gol D. Roger has a kid, his name is ACE! (Duh!)

OMGOSH! That was AWESMAZING! I absolutely Positively Exasperatingly LOVE THE STORY! XDXDXDXDXDXDXDXDXDXDXDXDXDXD

-Love Nitrea ;)

hehe cool.

hm sounds sorta okish...it seems a bit to the mary sueish side, but that's ok cause it's just the begining. This could be a pretty good story, but you may want to devlop your character(forgot the name sorry) a little bit. But other wise it's ok I guess.

May I point you in the direction of ? They have a Litmus Mary Sue test that this "Wintra (Failtra)" or "Wicca" (Stop bastardizing perfectly good religions) "Winter" (What's the deal with the season-name anyway?) or whoever needs. She's the epitome of a Mary Sue.

Also, "Zolo" is actually "Zoro". I realize that some version of the anime changed his name to Zolo, but more people recognize him as "Zoro".

Songfics (Stories that include the lyrics of a song as the main focus, or even just as a background) are generally not allowed here on FF dot net, and someone may report this for breaking the ToS. I won't, but someone will.