This is a nice little story! I stayed interested in what was going on the entire time, and everything felt very deliberate--like you are writing this story for yourself and nobody else. That said, I don't know if the characterization was all there, but seeing as this is so short there isn't much room for growth or epiphany on the characters or readers part. There were several things that I liked, however. You varied sentence and paragraph length which is a plus.

"She generally did, but this was a process they always went through."

This line jumped out at me, and I really liked it and it made me think of all the other times that they would have argued, it was nice. Also, the last line in the piece was nice; how he called her pretty, it made everything work and fit together better. A nice conclusion :) All in all, good job with this story! It was a fun and enjoyable read!

hahaha
sounds like kaiba alright!!

This piece is so cute. I like how simple it is because that's what kept it to be honest. And I adore how you characterize Kaiba. There are few writers on this website that seem to grasp his character, and you are one of them. He's got a God complex and is an **, and you allow him to be that. You did a great job with Anzu as well.

awsome, you should write a sequal. finally someone who made anzu look smart, usually she's really defensless and has a low self esteem issu. This is awsome and you should stick to writing more one shots like this!

Aww man! This was really good! a little short and as you said, the romance was subtle... but a sequel would be great! =P

Oh, I like this. I like how they both had their attitudes, but were slightly...calmer I guess is the word that I'm looking for. It was interesting. Very good. Couldn't tell you were rusty. Never would have know if you hadn't said anything. ;-)

~Midnight

Short, but cute ;D

very nice snippet :]

Wow, it's been a while since you've written anything. this was a cute and funny fic. I loved what you had for teh summary.
Good job.

~blue~

this was a very good story...:( to bad it was only a one shot

I have to say that this was the best piece I have read in ages.
It left me increadibly satisfied, so I really feel like explaining why in a long review. (which is not my habit)

First, I don't usually read this pairing, nor do I read anything about both characters mentionned in the fiction, but the summary you did was just amazing that I could not resist.

The first description you made on Kaiba's habits was excellent and somehow funny. Especially that I think that you got him right.

The mention of Machiavelli was the cherry on top of the cake!
The conversations were smart, very smart indeed.
it's rare to see a smart Anzu! which makes me wonder about your own IQ! I just love that.

the vision of the world of Kaiba was perfectly legitimate and possible in my own opinion. Especially that I do have this common conception with Kaiba, so I am plaesed. (I believe it's also yours somehow, because otherwise, you would not have agreed to it, would you?)

I was hard choosing a favorite part, but I think this one would do: "You’re not a prince, Kaiba. You’re a human being, even if you don’t always act like it."
What a harsh retort. That's more like a slap. This is probably why I like it. Slapping with words is so great...


to end this awfully long review, I would say that a conversation between you and kaiba would certanly be worth watching.

I hope all your texts are this smart, you're going to my favorites.