Did you say this was your FIRST story? It reads like you've been writing for years. I can't wait to see what your work is like five years from now.

Nicely in character, especially Heyes. Very believeable background on Lom, why he became an outlaw and why he went straight.

Penski, I think you already know I like this, huh?
I've always had a soft spot for Lom - so it is great to see him on THAT pilot visit to the Governor, and even better to [...wavy lines, wavy evocative music...] have you flash back to him as a young chap joining our boys in the DHG.
Love the line - 'Fire in the hole'
LOVE the 'KABOOM!' (Always makes me smile.)
Go 'Aw' when he has qualms over pointing a gun...
And a great, great last line bearing in mind we KNOW what is about to happen. (Another Kaboom!!)

Thank you for giving Lovely Loveable Lom a story.

Nicely done. Thanks for helping fill in the gaps in the tale of Curry and Heyes.