 RionaEire 2009-12-07 . chapter 1Cute episodic story of young Henry and his mom, showing Henry's charactor, both the pausitives and the flaws or differences (I guess they aren't really flaws since they aren't inherantly bad things, just different than what his mom wants for him.) You write well and stories written in little vignettes like this are fun, especially in regards to the growing up years of a child, capturing highlights for the reader. The one thing that seemed slightly confusing was the use of Henry's birth at the end of the story, I think you were going for a full circle feeling but it confused me a little, I got it at the end though so it was okay. Nicely written and good portrayal of Marian.
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