Whoa is that all? I expected a multi-chapter ficcy with tons of more things until they became 16 and then more sotry too! but anyways, this needs some editing but it's good as it is. You got me at the verge of tears from once in a while and let me tell you that's hard to achieve ;)

Keep up the good work and consider revising this story.

Hello, I have a few good comments for your story and a few bad ones.

Good stuff first: This story has a lot of potential, and the ending line is great.

Bad stuff: The grammar and spelling are really shabby. You've confused a lot of words that have different meanings depending on how you spell them (i.e. threw and through). Also, the fiasco with the pickles, you refer to the person selling the pickles as a man, but you used lady and her in the sentences afterwards. (The man glared at him and

shouted, "You think you can get free things?" Zidane gulped and was too scared of the *lady*

that when he began to run he tripped and smashed a whole jar of pickles.

Enraged the man grabbed Zidane by the arm and raised *her* fist in he air. "You good

for nothing kid trying to steal my hard earned work." )

Constructive Critism: More description and adjectives would be nice. I speak for myself here, I find that stories that give a strong mental image tend to be more fun to read.

I hope this helped you. I think if you go back and do some editing this will turn out to be a really good story.

This was so good! I like all the ideas, and I think you did a great job with this

Oh my gosh, that was such a great story! I think...I'm gonna...cry *grabs a box of tissues and sobs* Write more stuff soon _

OH GOD THAT WAS GOOD!I wanted to cry at the end!

You definatly did good on this bad thing is,I can't think of anything else to say _;;;

Very very cool! I always liked the friendship between Zidane and Blank this is a cool explanation...*wanted to thank her for her review and wants her to know that I am working on a RikkuXWakka ficcie that I have posted look on my profile*

I think you should write more FF9 stuff, this was really good

A LOT of spelling mistakes & grammer mistakes but other from that, a world class fic. Keep up the good work!

Hiya _ I love this fic. It's really well written. You must have worked really hard on it. I'll be back again soon to check out your other fics. Gotta go now. Later!

i love it!

I really loved it! you did a great job. I didn't know a 7 year old could be so violent O.O

I really liked the last paragraph. Keep writing your a very talented person

Loved it .Now I've gotta read more on Final Fantasy _!

wow, wow, wow, this story is just absolutely brilliant. i never thought that zidane/blank fics would be this good but you really capture their characters from the game. fab. :0)

Very original story..I liked it! It portrays both of them exactly like they are in the game!

Yai, this kind of fic is so rare I did a double take when I saw the summary. Blank and Zidane my fave characters from FFIX, and this fic has GOT to be one of the best ones I've seen yet.

This was cute! OOh... yeah, more ficcies from you! It kinda scared me, your description of Blank, but it was gooood! I never thought Blank Zidane friendship fics were really good

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