This is cute; it has potential. :) I found Flynn and Yuri's reactions to their new charges quite amusing.

I do have a few believability concerns. I'm okay with the Entelexeia-egg idea, don't know if it would happen or not but I can accept the concept. But I agree with one reviewer about them passing off the whole responsibility on the two men, when Estelle (and the rest, to some extent) had just as much invested in it.

Like in this line: "Yuri had promised him they wouldn't just demand the apatheia right away ... but after every encounter, they walked away with a new spirit at their side." I don't really see it that way. It's not like he wanted it to happen like that. Pretty much every one except the accident with Belius was due to them being forced to attack or take the apatheia. Phaeroh was injured, possibly dying, and gave it his blessing. Khroma said she wanted to test them to make sure they could really take down Alexei (that one I always thought was a little ridiculous, but it still wasn't like they had a choice but to fight and defeat her). Gusios had been driven mad by taking in too much aer. So it wasn't like Yuri was maliciously taking them against their will; otherwise, they probably would have discussed it with them and tried to convince them it was necessary.

Sorry, rant over. :) On the other hand, I have to respectfully disagree with the reviewer who took issue with the "21 is too young to get married and have kids" thing. Don't get me wrong, I don't think it technically is (I myself got married at 22!) but I do think it's consistent with Yuri's personality to say that. While Terca Lumireis does seem pseudo-medieval, it's not a direct copy. The blastia and gels, for example, allow them to be more advanced than real-world medieval times, in my opinion. I don't think the characters have an average lifespan of 40 years old, personally.

Wow, this is a long review. Hope you don't mind, I often have a lot to say. *laughs* Looking forward to the next part of the story.

Wow this is funny! PLEASE tell me you're not going to abandon this like so many other writers with great potential in their stories have! PLEASE update this!
And yes, Flynn does seem more Motherly...
...so yes. PLEASE UPDATE. If you don't, we (other reviewers included) will be very dissapointed in you.
Also, can I ask if you are going to (and I'm hoping, please don't) make this a YuriXFlynn romance thing? Are you? (please say no!)

"But was only toward the idea of giving up the blastia?" I stumbled heavily over this... what are you trying to say there?

"Flynn. We're twenty-one. We are way too damn young to be getting married and having kids. Okay?" Umm... actually that's about the normal age, they're definitely not too young. Going with the medieval theme that Vesperia seems to follow, most adults live to about 30-40 years.

"In fact, it seemed tougher than even his knight armor. This degree of hardness made diamonds seem soft." Oo! Excellent imagery there!

Heh, so much like Flynn to yell at Yuri about responsibilities. ^-^" But this is interesting... I'll have to follow this...

~~Kat

HA! Daddy!Flynn and Yuri(LOL). Poor flynn's dragon will die of food poisoning. I'd love to see how repede reacts to new additions to the family. (dogs are such jealous animals). But anyways, wouldn't Estelle technically have to raise an entelexeia too, since she was the one that killed Belius? Shoving it solely on Flynn and Yuro seems sort of...hypocritical...

Jeez, are you trying to have a fic for every single Tales of game?

This is going to be interesting. Ya I can see Flyyn being the "mother hen" of the two. Good luck Yuri and Flyyn you'll need it.

Mt-At

Flynn and Yuri are going to be father. I don't what kind of parents they will be (especially Yuri). So I think I just have to wait from you. Update soon!