... ... ...umm, wow. if this is how good you wrote when you were 12, then geez, you must be a pro writer now.

The story was paced ok, but near the end you seemed to be getting kind of lazy as the battle was getting repetitive...and yes i know the battle actually is repetitive.

kinda wish you had delved more into the jinjo-minjo war, but that actually gave me an idea for a story, if you don't mind me using that idea? I'd make sure to credit you for the original idea and inspiration, and mention this story.

very nice, a much higher graded story than a lot of the stuff i've seen around here lately.