:) What a wonderful story, you can tell as the story progressed you matured in your writing even in that short period. Fantastic job with this. :D:D ENJOYED LOTS!

And P.s Continue or make sequel hehe. It would be awesome. You don't have to if you don't want to but yeah :D

Thoroughly enjoyed Taron's and Kara's story. Wouldn't mind seeing what happens next in the next phrase of their life.

Please tell me thats not the end! PLEASE! Is it please let there be more i love this story and i think u sound continue it i dont now maybe something comes between there love and they have to fight it or they find each other and gang up and have a new adventures i dont care give them a kid OH! that would be perfect a alien hybrid Yes please do it take the idea i am begging u i am obviously bored out of my mind! well please think about okay i think this is just such a good story and i dont want to see it end so short PLEASE! X3

OH! SO EXCITED WHATS NEXT! What happened?!

very, very nice. you seem to always leave your chapters in a sort of cliff hanger way, it is most interesting.
please update soon.

hope Kara and Taron stay friendly.

Hm, interesting to see what happens next. it is proving to be an interesting prospect of Taron turning on Kara. But the feelings may yet play another factor. Good chapter. Now onto the darker side of things. I noticed that when you are empatising something you will use double quotation marks ("") when you only need to use single (''). It can get confusing as a speech could come a couple of words afters. Just a few gammer errors like that. other then that, an enjoyable read. Keep up the good work! ;D

I wonder how he would deal with her people when they get there? Wonder what the humans are going to do them? it's proving to be an interesting story with the twists and turns it takes. Keep up the good work! ;D

Well that is proving to be interesting. Can not wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work! ;D

This story is really interesting, i didnt think chapter 1 and 2 where told very well but reading further into your story i can see your getting much better. you have agood imagination. please update soon as you have me hooked.

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Yay. I knew it would be cool. Another great chapter. And very little spelling typos as well. Well done. Can not wait to see what happens next. My nerves are tingling just with the excitement. Keep up the good work! ;D

Now that is unfair. That was a good fight. Can not wait to see what the metal thing is used for. Sounds very interesting. Now onto the darker side of things. Watch the spelling. Spell check is wonderful at times but can be a bane at others. Took me a while to work some of the words like tack tic and baw. Other then that. I enjoyed that chapter. Please update soon. Keep up the good work! ;D

Very interesting. Love how you made a quiet understanding between them. Can not wait to see the fight scene next chapter. Keep up the good work! ;D

Love the chapters so far. Very much improved. Excellent writing. Please update soon! Keep up the good work! ;D

It needs a bit of work on the spelling as such. Not as incorrect, but things like "crabbed" instead of "grabbed". Just little things like that. Just a few typo errors. Just need to read over the paragraph to make sure it reads right. "Took over me" could be replace with "overtook me." The dialog should also be split up. Makes it a bit easier to differ between who is talking. Either than that, very well written. The flow is better if you ignore the errors. Very interested in that "trusty round thingy." Update soon! Can not wait to see what happens next. Keep up the good work! ;D

Wow! Love the tension building. The flow was better this time. I had genuinely enjoyed reading this chapter. Would like you to very much update now. You have peaked my interest more. Keep up the good work! ;D