I find this interesting! If you ever continue, I look forward to reading more. :)

a black uniformed office (you forgot the r here)
and 's here am attached to Grand Admiral Takel office
just so you are aware the entire chapter is bolded and underlined. i'm not sure that was your intent but it is.
nice chapter. you might consider making them a tad longer.

cheers,
oldman543

great revision on the ominous call back. makes it much more believable.
cheers,
oldman543

Nice again. You have a few grammar mistakes with your words such as you missing the r in officer in your last paragraph. I offer my services as a beta if you want them, however I can honestly say my skills lie in fixing plot holes and knoledge of the SW universe. Not so much in grammar. I can fix spelling mistakes and maror grammar problems but things like comma placement drive me nuts. If you don't mind that them I'm available if you want me.

Another thing I wanted to piont out is that on ships you have shifts, usually eight hours long with three shifts. The captain, commander and the lieutennants rotate shifts. Also the pilots are all officers and usually on such a large ship there is probably another commander (like a wing commander) for the support ships. Most senior bridge officers all serve as officer of the watch at least once during a tour of service. Keep in mind that there is at lest twenty people ,most of which are officers, on the bridge. Also there is probably between fifty and a hundred officers on the ship. You might add another officer rank like a lieutenant 3rd class or ensign because having only four officer ranks on a huge ship like that is unrealiztic in my opinion. Maybe even make a senior commander's rank.

Good luck,
Oldman543

Just afew things. First nice so far. I like what I see. Second you should look into a beta to help with your grammar and spelling mistakes. You won't be able to catch them all by your self. Last if I remember corirectly this story is not set in the 1700's on earth and the characters aren't brittish so you can drop the aye and just leave it at yes sir. In the military saying aye aye is not so popular anymore no matter how cool it may sound. It is your choice of course. Good so far, keep it up.

Hello there! Thank you very much for letting me know about your fic. I'm very happy to add it to the Galactic Empire c2.

Captain Nithans sounds like a typically hated Imperial officer. I can't find much to like about him, but I am very curious as to why his regular everyday drudgery is interrupted by a call to return to the Imperial Center. I feel that you've set up a good character with plenty of room for character development as the story goes along.

General Keiv seems to be a different breed of Imperial, "more humanitarian", I believe you wrote. I'm still unsure what Commander Wilfons is all about, but he seems to be a proficient XO.

I think this fic is off to a great start. Until next time! ^_^

-IJedi