 Lauren 2009-06-24 . chapter 1 I enjoyed reading this. I like the Daniel/Lindsay interaction where she tries to set boundaries but does not want to hurt his feelings. I like that she cares about him but also recognizes his fault. I like that you portrayed him as being both manipulative and also vulnerable, especially in regards to people perceiving him as stupid. I think that is spot on with the show.
I also liked the interaction when the others showed up at the diner. I like that you did not describe Nick's reaction, just Lindsay telling him "Stop giving me that look." Kim and Ken's playful knocking each other seems a little nicer than the interactions they had on the show, but I liked reading it. I think the Daniel/Lindsay scene was more natural than the scene with the larger group, but all of it was written well. I also think that as you write the larger group more it will seem more natural. I also really liked Nick taping a drum solo on the table, he would so do that. Thanks for writing. |