Lol on the drake and josh thing

Lol well done for completing it :) I didn't know you'd put up the final chapter, well done, it was quite unique but hey, thats what Fanfiction is all about, having a variation of writers and styles. You certainly brought out some of the "off the wall" comedy of Family Guy which is good, and some of the dialogue I could just picture, especially some of Peter's lines lol. Anyway well done x

Oh, that's a good ending. Now I can't wait for WD2. I hope it's as long and as good as WI2.

Funny and maybe just a little too violent.

Not sure why you decided to do a Gears of War reference, but okay, I'll run with it.

Oh, I love Jaina. I mean I love LOVE Jaina. She's so cute and adorable, and she's fiery when she needs to be.

Awesome, I like the humor that's flowing. Just one problem, you might wan't to work on character reactions a bit more. If I know Bhaal, and I do, he's a master at reactions and interaction between characters. You might want to go to him for pointers.

Good ending. I'll have to wait for WD2 to see how this ends.

Okay that was a little random in some places. Needless deaths, but hey I'm not a fan of deaths in anything really so thats just me...But anyway as a tip, try not to allow some of it to clutter. You have fair spacing but in this part for example --

"Then out of no where Darren arrives and says "Hey I'm here, what did I miss?" "Oh nothing much we're just about to get KILLED!" Chris says "Anyway why are you so late?" Lois asks "Oh I was sending people links to the fat man's pics tanning, you know your becoming quite popular" Darren says."

It needs to be separated out so it makes sense, just remember a new line everytime someone new speaks. That should help, so it should look like this.

Then out of no where Darren arrives and says "Hey I'm here, what did I miss?"
"Oh nothing much we're just about to get KILLED!" Chris says
"Anyway why are you so late?" Lois asks
"Oh I was sending people links to the fat man's pics tanning, you know your becoming quite popular" Darren says.

Thats clearer. It's an easy mistake to fix and one a few writers have done (including myself) on here...and whats the apology for at the end? and as a final note, be careful not to slip out of the characters personalities with the dialogue. Good luck on the final chapter.

~x-xMasqueradeAngelx-x

Matt already has the power to use Lightning based attacks. Good chapter though. Keep up the updating (See what I did there?)

That was really good :) Lol, I liked the "gears of war" refference lol, and Peter's remark, that was so simply but so funny.
"Lois honey...shut up" hehe it was good :) I liked Brians part in there too ^_^ Well done, and keep up the good work xx

"Alright" Matt says then thinks about Jaina and then turns back to normal.

Well, we all know which kid Matt favors.

Ahh the Locusts. A proud race of extremely thick aliens, who remain convinced of humanity's inferiority even after you've killed everyone they've ever met.

Great chapter Freeze. Hope to see more.

Hilarious, but just for the record, Jaina weilds two jagged daggers, not a little sword.

Another well written chapter :) with only a couple of slight errors, but they can be easily fixed. A very comical chapter, and I do enjoy Brian and Stewie's bickering in this, and Brian's problem that he blames on his father ^_^ Well done and keep up the good work! x

Lol some of that was so random but pretty funny in some parts. I liked Stewie and Brian when they started an argument, it's typical of them really...Well Done! x