 anonymous 2009-06-22 . chapter 1 "That usually gives me a terrible headache." Osaka explained.
Should be:
"That usually gives me a terrible headache," Osaka explained.
(It's a comma at the end of a quotation, not a period.)
It's manga, not magna. It's Linkin Park, not Likin Park (and the formatting of the song was messed up when this story was submitted).
Other than that, this was pretty good.
PS: You can spell the name Yui on a Qwerty keyboard, and "OR" on a Dvorak keyboard. |