Great story! I like how you write in present tense for this and a few of your other stories. It's not very common, but it's a great change of pace~ Anyway, I love this pairing, so I was excited when I saw that one of my favorite authors had written a story with them~

~Kate

I hadn't thought of Motoki that way! I will have to keep that in mind when I read STC or any story for that matter, I thought he was a genuinely nice guy who looked on the bright side of most things. Thanks! (I mean it) and I'll get onto the others as soon as i can.

I'm glad that this was written. Motoki has always been written as the 'nice guy' without a single fault to his name. I myself have even done the same. But what you've done is make him more human, so to speak, by giving him these less than likable traits that everyone else had to some degree.
As for Lita, her portrayal was well done too. The rock that everyone thinks she is has her own insecurities as well. And the two of them do fit well together, like cogs that keep the water running.

Excellent!

Ooh! I saw this one on your website a couple of days ago when I needed a quick Eight of Swords fix. Love you're writing. I liked how you depicted Motoki. It reminded me of the guy from "Pleasantville" who worked at the restaurant and would just continue to wipe the counters with a smile on his face. I found myself feeling a lot like Motoki when I started working before all of my other friends back in high school. I was always jealous of how they were free and I was working. This is a pretty piece. Thank you.