Well i have to say, i am very happy with how your description ahs evolved. Description wise it was very good and you know that is hard to get out of me being a description nazu! Lol any who you also did well with feelings and expression. I like how you were able to really make the reader feel it, could be a tad better but sicne you were basing it off somethign else really good.

I am a Yugi fan, so I liked this story even if it had a sad ending. I want to see the site you talked about on Monday. Spell check would be a good idea.

LOL (I dun feel like logging in) Best fic EVAR XD