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shallwedance9 8/18/09 . chapter 1DEFINITELY GREAT! Are you going to continue? Cause i love it! |
Nytd 6/29/09 . chapter 1It's nice to see someone expand upon the possibility of what happened after Elizabeth storms out, especially if you ship Walsibeth. What I would very constructively suggest is having this read by an experienced beta reader familiar with the Elizabeth movies. While your basic scene is intriguing, you have a fair number of grammatical and especially punctuation errors in this that detract from the flow of the story and make it harder to read. Beta readers can be infinitely helpful -mine helps tone down my rampant comma usage, and finds a few things that I miss no matter how many times I've proof read something. I'd love to see this spiffed up and re-posted, as there are very few good fics in this fandom. Walsingham is a strong and intruiguing character, and I like that you keep him that way even in the presence of the queen. Have you read Intrepid Bandicoot's 'The Heart of the Leviathan'? Very elegantly written, and a fabulous look at Walsingham. I highly recommend it! Cheers! Nytd |