Interesting read, but I have two things to quibble over: a. You lift TOO much from the series- it's not original enough; b. Kara is OOC- according to cannon, she does love Anders in the romantic sort of way, at least before New Caprica, and this story doesn't reflect those feelings. Also there's a few factual errors, mainly in the names of the colonies... but I'm letting that slide in my reading of it because I think it might just be typos.

One of the thing I liked best about the story, though, was that you did it in Kara's voice. I don't see a lot of people doing that. Very cool.

write more!

i loved it!

this scene was really good!

kara just had to ruin it by marrying sam!

gorgeous,I look forward to more

It's good to read something written in FP from Kara's POV. The words ring true, the way she'd phrase things or say things (or think over things). Given that we never really heard Kara ever share her inner workings about that night, it's interesting to think about what was really running through her mind as the events unfolded. I'm looking forward to seeing how you bring the rest of the story forward!