 Nyah-Chan 2009-06-24 . chapter 1Usually I don't care much for these kind of stories (with prompts and only writing a few paragraphs) but I really enjoyed some of these (Specifically 'Betrayal', 'Good Night' and 'Torture') And what a good way to end this story~
I don't have much crit because, as I said, I don't read many short pieces so I don't really know how to compare this to anything. u_u sorry...
Anywho, typos, if you care~
(In ‘Insanity’)
He knew Tseng was an intelligent and observant man, so he could never understand why he was so concerned over his Aibous behaviour.
“Aibou’s”
(in ‘weeping’)
Of course, he had stopped after be given a few old ones to keep as his own.
“be” to “being”
(in ‘mystery’)
Why did Renos eyes soften when he gazed at Rude alone?
“Reno’s”
(in ‘Alone’)
People who be a constant part of his life and actually give a damn about his opinion were a novelty.
There should probably be a ‘would’ between ‘who’ and ‘be’
(in ‘Torture’)
Rude's first thought once he was allowed in his partners hospital room,
“partner’s”
(I got more than halfway through this before I found any typos, and they're all pretty small ones :D) |