Wow, this is really good! I haven't seen the movie in forever, but it feels like it could be a scene out of it. :) good job.

Splendid! I like Jacob's thoughts! I like how he thinks of the interesting comment that his father made one time.

The only thing is..what is Jacob's thoughts at the end? At the moment Klaatu keeps him and Helen from dying as the result of the aphids (nanites)? I'd like to see this continued. This fandom is slowly becoming just a bundle of cobwebs. Glad to see something new here.