Fascinating. All the signs said "great" luck, but not "good" luck *lol* I guess that is what you get for relying on luck alone.
The only luck one should rely on, is the luck you make. Murphy's law and all that.

I didn't find any major spelling errors, Just a few mis pronunciations.
For example; "It is time!" Varwas shouted out.

For the most part, I am finding this fic solid so far. So keep it up. After all, practise makes perfect.

Until next time. "Luck runs out, skill doesn't!"

"Diplomats are just as essential in starting a war as soldiers are for finishing it." -Will Rogers

Good start. I hope you continue. :)
I'm sure we'll be expecting tragedy of cataclysmic proportions very soon.

Not a bad idea so story wise you might be onto something interesting. And the above par grammer tells me that your not rushing things too much.
The only big problem I've noticed is that Krystal (in pictures of her) does not have black arms or legs. Other then that big problem, I'd say your doing fairly well.

Just because you might have to rewrite a few things, doesn't mean you have to give up. With a few detail changes, I am sure this fic will be a good one. So stay at it!

Luck runs out, skill doesn't!

"Did you know... there are three kinds of aces? Those who seek strength, those who live for there pride, and those who can read the tide of battle. Those are the three." - Larry "Pixy" Foulke, Ace Combat Zero.

I am loving the story line so far, it is an interesting topic im surprised no one else has writen about. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!