Pretty well written (which from me is a compliment...I'd say this was better written then about 85% of the other fics on this site)

Main problem was the overuse of Shawn's name...it seemed like every time Gus addressed him he used his name, which was weird.

Other than that, I like me some Shawn whumpage...so I'm pleased.

This was really good. another chapter would be awsome. you do a really good job of keeping the charecters just like they are in the show. awsome job with the banter... one little nittpick though... several times you put that shawn 'intimidated' the murderers, but i'm thinking you meant 'antagonized'. bit different meanings there. but otherwise, great job! please write more!

I think your story is just AWSOME!
Loving the robburderers;) Couldn't stop laughing throughout the entire story. Wonderful.

Great story! Keep up the good work:)

Hey! I really enjoyed this! Great story! You made me giggle.

I liked the banter, you should do the second part!

Shawn is a twit!! Love this story, completely hooked! I laughed so hard at Chopstick Chortleton, and the guy who believed that was his name! Cannot wait for more!